Re: EOWG: Actions items for final WCAG 2.0 presentation

Thanks for the additional feedback, Shadi. Comments below:

> Slide #1:
> - Current wording: "The Notes section contains...on this slide, the 
> notes start with..."
> - Suggestion: "The Notes section on each slide contains...on each slide, 
> the notes section starts with..."
> - Rationale: clarify that the notes section is on each slide (rather 
> than part of the presentation)

Current wording: "The Notes section contains important information. Make sure you can read the Notes. On this slide, the notes start with “[NOTES SECTION: This is where the important information is…]”"

Done: Changed the first sentence to: "The Notes section for each slide contains important information."
(Didn't change the second part because the Notes section doesn't start with that text on each slide, only on that first slide.)

> Slide #5:
> - Current wording "WCAG ... Optimized for"
> - Suggestion: consider clarifying that you mean the WCAG *document* -I 
> initially read it as the WCAG *resources* as you do refer to some of 
> them in later slides (Quick Referece, Techniques, FAQ, ...).

Done: Added "2.0" in the slides and Notes and bolded "WCAG 2.0 itself" in the Notes.
(I considered bolding "There is other material for people with different levels of accessibility knowledge." However, we don't have much of that at this point - which is another reason why I'm not very concerned with differentiating /TR/WCAG20 from the supporting resources here.)

> Instructions:
> - Current wording: "It does not cover the actual requirements in WCAG 
> 2.0, basics of Web accessibility, the business case for accessibility, 
> policies, laws, or other aspects of accessibility. For material covering 
> these topics, see the WAI Resources list."
> - Suggestion: consider putting this information as part of the "Content 
> Outline" subsection.

I started to do this... and then got an email from Sharron with concerns about the presentation for an audience that is just learning about WCAG. Therefore I'm thinking it's important to leave up top that it doesn't cover the basics. Also, I'm hoping that this will get lots of attention, and so wanted to take the opportunity to mention the other resources that do cover that it doesn't. I shortened and simplified it by linking stuff in the first sentence and deleting the last, and removing the parenthesis.

> Instructions:
> - Current wording: "Image credits and information on permission to use 
> are included in the Notes section where the image first appears."
> - Suggestion: "Image credits and information on permission to use (if 
> used separately from the presentation) are included in the Notes section 
> where the image first appears."

Since the previous version, I added information in the Notes for each image and photo. With the updated info, the parenthetical bit is not quite correct.

> Instructions:
> - Current wording: "Additionally, you are granted permission to create 
> modifications or derivatives of the material."
> - Question: this permission does not include the images, correct?

Correct, this permission does not include the images that we don't hold the copyright for. The previous sentence says: "The WCAG 2.0 presentation material is copyright© W3C and licensed under the W3C Document License, *with the exception of some of the images.*" and then there is a subsection with it's own big <h3> that says, "Image credits and information on permission to use are included in the Notes section where the image first appears."

Let me know if you think that's not sufficient. Note that I don't think in practice there is any concern with reuse of any of these images. I'm just trying to make sure that we are open on who owns them and what permissions we're using them under.

~Shawn

Received on Wednesday, 12 September 2007 21:56:11 UTC