- From: Alan Chuter <achuter@teleservicios.com>
- Date: Fri, 06 Aug 2004 12:32:57 +0200
- To: w3c-wai-eo@w3.org
The first sentence ends "pwd can use the Web" Is this what we mean here? Might it not be better to say something like "An accessible Web is one that can be used by PWD" (of course there is only one Web, but "The accessible Web" isn't right either) or "Web accessibility is about ensuring that PWD can use the Web". In the third paragraph "organizations" confused me at first. Perhaps "Web site owners/managers" might be better. It doesn't seem right that this paragraph is longer than the previous one (although perhaps it is more difficult to explain). Do we need to include older people. Surely it only affects them if they are disabled, in which case they don't fit in this paragraph. We could rewrite the third sentence to be shorter: "This benefits everyone, including those without disabilities but in problem/difficult situations..." "For more information on how organizations benefit from Web accessibility, see" could be cut to "See also" Alan Chuter achuter@teleservicios.com
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