business case comments

I am responding to the questions that Shawn posed on April 2, 2004. I really
like format and I think that the topics are in the appropriate sections.
Here are a few suggestions:

On the page: http://www.w3.org/WAI/EO/Drafts/bcase/Overview.html
Should the term "custom" be used in the heading "Developing a Custom
Business Case"? If we want to use this meaning, then the word should be
"customized." But, I don't think that this section speaks to "customized."
It addresses the business case in various environments. 

On the page: http://www.w3.org/WAI/EO/Drafts/bcase/tech.html
The heading says "Enable Content on Different Configurations." But the text
below the heading says "in different configurations." Which is correct "on"
or "in"?

On the page: http://www.w3.org/WAI/EO/Drafts/bcase/tech.html
Beneath the heading "Be Prepared for Advanced Technologies," change "as
follows" to "such as" or "for example."

On the page: http://www.w3.org/WAI/EO/Drafts/bcase/fin.html
Change the heading "Decreases cost of translating" to "Decreases Costs of
Translations."

http://www.w3.org/WAI/EO/Drafts/bcase/fin.html
Suggest change heading "What stage is the organization's development?" to
"At which stage is the organization's development?" or "When should
organizations address accessibility?"

Libby Cohen

Received on Saturday, 10 April 2004 17:20:56 UTC