RE: Updated draft of standards harmonization document

Following up on Helle's comment:

Overview, Paragraph. 4: to reduce redundancy and clarify the sentence... my 
suggestion is:

Standards harmonization helps drive improvement of tools to evaluate 
accessibility: better evaluation tools can speed the repair of Web sites.

Chuck


At 2003-12-19 07:19, Helle Bjarnø wrote:


>Comment to section 4 in the Overview chapter:
>
>"Standards harmonization likewise helps drive improvement of tools to
>evaluate Web site accessibility, which helps improve the accessibility of
>Web sites. It enables sharing of implementation and training resources for
>Web accessibility. It enables the development of shareable knowledge
>repositories from which one can develop accessible and re-usable online
>learning modules."
>
>I'm not sure I understand the meaning of this, maybe it's just the word
>"likewise". I'm not comfortable with the first sentence and not quite sure I
>understand it. Let's talk about it on the call.
>Cheers
>Helle
>
>
>Helle Bjarnø
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>
>
>-----Original Message-----
>From: Judy Brewer [mailto:jbrewer@w3.org]
>Sent: Friday, December 19, 2003 9:54 AM
>To: EOWG
>Subject: Updated draft of standards harmonization document
>
>
>EOWG:
>
>Please take a look at the updated draft of "Why Standards Harmonization is
>Essential to Web Accessibility."
>          http://www.w3.org/WAI/EO/Drafts/standard-harmon.html
>
>I cut the overall length by 25%; re-shuffled the order; eliminated and/or
>re-integrated some sections; and tried to shorten most of the long
>sentences. I didn't work straight from the change log but will go back over
>it later.
>
>There are still some redundancies that I was not able to shake out of the
>document yet.... perhaps we can give points in the EOWG teleconference
>today for every redundancy that anyone can find...
>
>Talk to you soon,
>
>- Judy
>
>
>
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