Editorial updates per ACTION-767 proposals

I've completed the Editorial updates for 

1. XML Encryption 1.1 (also made change to XML Signature 1.1 to unify handling of with/omit comments), 

2. the XML Encryption 1.1 explanation document (also changed title), and 

3. Generic Hybrid Ciphers.

Still need to look at requirements document.

Open:

Need direct link for X9.44 (not a blocker for CR)
Need RFC for ECC-ALGS (but not a blocker for CR)
Update 1.1 cross references when going to CR

regards, Frederick

Frederick Hirsch
Nokia



On Jan 17, 2011, at 11:54 AM, ext Magnus Nystrom wrote:

> Frederick, All,,
> This is in response to ACTION-767 assigned to me last week.
> 
> I don't know where the references are stored any longer so I have not done any changes in the sources themselves but I did note the following:
> 
> XML Encryption 1.1:
> -------------------------
> - The reference for NFC: The URL should be preceded by the string "URL:" as for other references
> - The reference for ANSI X9.52 should be linked as the reference for ANSI X9.44. As it is right now, one only gets to the generic ANSI home page.
> - The link to XML Signature Syntax and Processing Version 1.1 will need to be updated eventually; same for XML Encryption Syntax and Processing 1.1.
> - For [ECC-ALGS], we should check if it has been given an RFC number yet. I will follow up on this. I believe it should still be informative in this document.
> 
> Outside of the references:
> - Section 5.1.1: Should probably be consistent in how we reference the "with"/"omit" comments; sometimes we write "(omit comments)" and sometimes "with comments" (i.e. without parenthesis) and sometimes "comments" is spelled with a capital "C".
> - Section 8.2, replace "they will be" with "there will be"
> 
> Explain:
> -----------
> - My affiliation should be changed to Microsoft.
> - 3.3: Change "Clarify" to "Clarified that"
> - 5.4.2: That change is not relative to 1.0 and so I am not sure it should be in here.
> - "Message Authentication ..." - change "200900602" to "20090602"
> - 8.2: Change description of first change to: "Changed "MIME media type name" to " Type name" and "MIME subtype name" to "Subtype name"
> 
> Generic Hybrid Ciphers:
> -----------------------------
> - Section 9, "Acknowledgements" is empty; in line with the other documents I suggest removing this section altogether and instead creating a Section 1.2 "Acknowledgements" with the following text:
> 
> The contributions of the following Working Group members to this specification are gratefully acknowledged in accordance with the contributor policies and the active WG roster: Frederick Hirsch, Brian LaMacchia, Thomas Roessler, Magnus Nyström, Bruce Rich, Scott Cantor, Hal Lockhart, Cynthia Martin, Ed Simon, Pratik Datta and Meiko Jensen.
> 
> Additionally, we thank Burt Kaliski of EMC for his comments during and subsequent to Last Call.
> 
> - In Appendix A, the URL to [XMLENC-CORE1] and [XMLDSIG-CORE1] should be updated, eventually, just as for XML Encryption 1.1.
> 
> Requirements
> -----------------
> (I was not sure what to do here, but I did check the references section as per below:)
> - [C14N-REQS]: The URL is different between the hyperlink in the title and the explicit URL.
> - [C14N11]: Same as previous comment
> - [EXI]: Missing hyperlink in title
> - [Gajek]: Missing hyperlink in title
> - [Infoset]: Missing hyperlink in title
> - [McIntoshAustel] - Missing URL altogether. A possible URL is: http://portal.acm.org/citation.cfm?doid=1103022.1103026
> - PKCS #5: Missing hyperlink in title
> - RFC 2633 is obsoleted by RFC 3851
> - SigProp: Different URL for title than for explicit URL.
> - XMLDsig2nd: Missing hyperlink in title
> 
> Best,
> -- Magnus
> 
>

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