changes to authority displays Re: Editing "Issues"

On 8 Sep 2011, at 11:11, Emmanuelle Bermes wrote:
> 
> -"Library data is expressed primarily in natural-language text" [3]
> I still don't like the wording of the last sentence with 3 "that" in a
> very long phrase,

Good point.

> but couldn't come up with a decent solution...

Here's another attempt, FWIW:
"In order to change authority displays, all related records must be retrieved and their text strings changed  -- a disruptive and expensive process that often prevents libraries from implementing changes in a timely manner."


> except just splitting the sentence in 2 :
> "The absence or insufficient support of links by library systems
> raises important issues. Changes to authority displays require that
> all related records be retrieved in order to change their text strings
> -- a disruptive and expensive process that often prevents libraries
> from implementing changes in a timely manner."

> [3] http://www.w3.org/2005/Incubator/lld/wiki/Draft_issues_page_take2#Library_data_is_expressed_primarily_in_natural-language_text


The current version, for comparison:
"Changes to authority displays require that all related records be retrieved in order to change their text strings -- a disruptive and expensive process that often prevents libraries from implementing changes in a timely manner."

-Jodi