Re: Draft: Executive Summary

I just added my paragraph too, so the complete diff :
http://www.w3.org/2005/Incubator/lld/wiki/index.php?title=ExecutiveSummary&diff=5846&oldid=5758

Emma

On Wed, Aug 24, 2011 at 10:52 PM, Antoine Isaac <aisaac@few.vu.nl> wrote:

> OK, done!
> http://www.w3.org/2005/**Incubator/lld/wiki/index.php?**
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>  +1, Antoine. I'd say - go ahead and make those changes. - kc
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>> Quoting Antoine Isaac <aisaac@few.vu.nl>:
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>>  Hi Emma,
>>>
>>> I was just about to make remarks that would lead to a similar re-write,
>>> so a big +1 :-)
>>>
>>> I think there's also some redundancy in this pragraph:
>>> [
>>> This report contains an analysis of current state of library linked data,
>>> including detailed inventories of available vocabularies and technologies.
>>> The analysis was based on a set of use cases contributed by a variety of
>>> parties ranging from small, independent projects to activities in national
>>> libraries. From these the group extracted benefits, a brief report of the
>>> current state of library linked data, and recommendations for next steps.]
>>>
>>> I'd propose
>>> [
>>> Our work originates from a set of use cases contributed by a variety of
>>> parties ranging from small, independent projects to activities in national
>>> libraries. From these the group extracted benefits, a brief report of the
>>> current state of library linked data, and recommendations for next steps.
>>> Our analysis also features detailed inventories of available vocabularies
>>> and technologies.
>>> ]
>>>
>>> Finally, I'm afraid I'll argue for downplaying the last paragraph of the
>>> second part, on the Community Group. As we don't know when, or even,
>>> whether, such a group will happen, I suggest instead of the current:
>>> [
>>> The Incubator Group will transition to a W3C community group to provide
>>> an ongoing focal point for this activity. The community group will form
>>> shortly after the ending date for the incubator group. At that point the
>>> founders of the community group will solicit membership and ideas for
>>> directions and activities.
>>> ]
>>> by
>>> [
>>> To accompany such efforts, the members of the Incubator Group will seek
>>> to continue its activities and provide an ongoing focal point for these, for
>>> instance by transitioning to a W3C community group. At that point the
>>> founders of the community group would solicit membership and ideas for
>>> directions and activities.
>>> ]
>>>
>>> Would that work?
>>>
>>> Antoine
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>>>
>>>  Hi Karen & all,
>>>>
>>>> I propose some rewriting on the first paragraph of the executive
>>>> summary, trying to make it both shorter and more easily understandable to an
>>>> outsider (for instance I think the quotes for the phrase extracted from the
>>>> charter are irrelevant here). Also I tried to reflect the broader scope of
>>>> our definition of Libraries.
>>>>
>>>> currently:
>>>>
>>>> This is the report of the W3C Library Linked Data Incubator Group.
>>>> Working from May 2010 until August 2011, the group was given the charge to
>>>> "...help increase global interoperability of library data on the Web, by
>>>> bringing together people involved in Semantic Web activities—focusing on
>>>> Linked Data—in the library community and beyond, building on existing
>>>> initiatives, and identifying collaboration tracks for the future."
>>>>
>>>> The reason for the existence of this group at this time is the great
>>>> interest in sharing bibliographic data on the Web using Linked Data
>>>> technologies. For this to be successful it will be necessary to publish
>>>> library data on the web using semantic web standards.
>>>>
>>>>
>>>> I propose:
>>>>
>>>> The W3C Library Linked Data Incubator Group worked from May 2010 until
>>>> August 2011, this final report being the main outcome of this activity. The
>>>> mission of the incubator group was to help increase global interoperability
>>>> of library data on the Web. At this time, libraries and other cultural
>>>> heritage or memory institutions, including museums and archives, show a
>>>> great interest in sharing data on the Web. Existing use cases and library
>>>> applications showcase the benefits of adopting Semantic Web standards and
>>>> Linked Data principles, in order to publish valuable information assets that
>>>> library create and curate, such as bibliographic data, lists of concepts,
>>>> names, persons, etc.
>>>>
>>>>
>>>> What do you think ?
>>>> Emma
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>>>> On Tue, Aug 16, 2011 at 3:05 PM, Jodi Schneider <
>>>> jodi.schneider@deri.org <mailto:jodi.schneider@deri.**org<jodi.schneider@deri.org>>>
>>>> wrote:
>>>>
>>>> It's very good to have a start on this! I think what's there is rather
>>>> discouraging, particularly in the summary of analysis. Unfortunately I don't
>>>> have time to look closer and possibly fix it -- but perhaps someone else can
>>>> push further the start Karen has given us?
>>>>
>>>> I'm not sure whether, for our readers, Linked Data is obvious as a
>>>> starting point -- so I'd rather that we talk about "great interest in
>>>> sharing bibliographic data on the Web" rather than the "great interest in
>>>> sharing bibliographic data on the Web using Linked Data technologies". This
>>>> is a pretty significant change so I didn't just make it!
>>>>
>>>> -Jodi
>>>>
>>>> On 11 Aug 2011, at 15:35, Karen Coyle wrote:
>>>>
>>>>  There is now a very drafty Executive Summary in the transcluded report.
>>>>> This should stimulate a discussion of what information should be included in
>>>>> the ExecSum. Please read and comment.
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>>>>> Our goal is to keep the ExecSum within a single page, so be aware that
>>>>> any information included in this section must be very succinct. However,
>>>>> there is room for expansion as the current draft is especially short.
>>>>>
>>>>> http://www.w3.org/2005/**Incubator/lld/wiki/**ExecutiveSummary<http://www.w3.org/2005/Incubator/lld/wiki/ExecutiveSummary>
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>>>>> --
>>>>> Karen Coyle
>>>>> kcoyle@kcoyle.net <mailto:kcoyle@kcoyle.net> http://kcoyle.net
>>>>> ph: 1-510-540-7596 <tel:1-510-540-7596>
>>>>> m: 1-510-435-8234 <tel:1-510-435-8234>
>>>>> skype: kcoylenet
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