Re: [Backplane XG] Updated final report

Thanks, Jack...yes -- those are the edits I've been wanting to get to but
have been tied up doing references and figures etc.  So I think you have
the correct version.  Charlie

Charles Wiecha
Multichannel Web Interaction
IBM T.J. Watson Research Center
P.O. Box 704
Yorktown Heights, N.Y.  10598
Phone: (914) 784-6180, T/L 863-6180, Cell: (914) 232-3483
wiecha@us.ibm.com



                                                                                                                              
  From:       Jack Jansen <Jack.Jansen@cwi.nl>                                                                                
                                                                                                                              
  To:         Charles F Wiecha/Watson/IBM@IBMUS                                                                               
                                                                                                                              
  Cc:         public-xg-app-backplane <public-xg-app-backplane@w3.org>                                                        
                                                                                                                              
  Date:       10/18/2009 04:52 PM                                                                                             
                                                                                                                              
  Subject:    Re: [Backplane XG] Updated final report                                                                         
                                                                                                                              
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On  17-Oct-2009, at 23:00 , Charles F Wiecha wrote:



      All -- attached is the final report updated with references and
      edited long descriptions to line up with correct figures. I've
      reluctantly followed the practice of other XG's in hardcoding the
      section numbers to avoid the previous problems with the CSS
      autonumbering on different browsers. I *still* have to make a final
      pass for the real editing so it will be a few days before we can make
      the publication request...deadline for that before TPAC is Oct 27.

      I would appreciate any -1's ASAP if you have problems releasing
      essentially this text for publication...otherwise, I will proceed to
      final editing for readability etc and request publication
      shortly...Thanks, Charlie



Charles,
I still see various "..." in the introduction. Am I looking at the correct
version?

As I'm going to be offline for the rest of the week I'll put in my comments
anyway.

Section 2, last three paragraphs.
- "section one/two/three"  have no clear mapping to chapter numbers, could
you add those?
- Could you mention the conclusions section separately, and state that we
suggest future work there (so people will at least read that)?

Section 3
- The first time we use RIA, should we define the acronym?
- The "return to text" link at the end of the figure 1 longdesc doesn't
work for me (it opens the directory containing all the html files)

That's all, I guess.
--
Jack Jansen, <Jack.Jansen@cwi.nl>, http://www.cwi.nl/~jack
If I can't dance I don't want to be part of your revolution -- Emma Goldman