Hi, Jay, Chris– On 9/2/13 12:04 PM, Andre Jay Meissner wrote: > Chris and me wrote a resume for the blog. Please review, as always it > needs two approvers please: > http://blog.webplatform.org/?p=626&preview=true This post (and Doc Sprint) looks great! Really good color. I suggest a couple of minor tweaks: * Does Andre Jay Meissner from Adobe always refer to himself in the 3rd person? :P I'm not sure how to fix this, other than to suggest "I ( Andre Jay Meissner from Adobe) kicked off proceedings"... which also sounds weird. Oh, well. * "kicked off proceedings" -> "kicked off the proceedings" * stuck in: in American English (such as it is), this has a negative connotation, like they were forced to do this against their will (like, "stuck in traffic" or "stuck in school on a Spring day"). I think in British English, it means "to start doing something enthusiastically". Maybe "and jumped head-first in to a variety of tasks" or something? Thanks again for the Doc Sprint and the report! Regards- -DougReceived on Tuesday, 3 September 2013 01:01:06 UTC
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