- From: Manu Sporny <msporny@digitalbazaar.com>
- Date: Thu, 16 May 2013 22:23:44 -0400
- To: Web Payments CG <public-webpayments@w3.org>
On 05/16/2013 05:49 PM, Steven Rowat wrote: > I think your bulk-of-the-page 'why it's amazing' paragraphs need a > more concise lead paragraph. > > And I think you have just the paragraph near the end, which I'd > suggest moving up to the 2nd paragraph. Then put a title, > "Details/Background" or something, before the rest. Great suggestions, Steven! I've updated the page to reflect the layout you suggested. I think it flows much better now, what do you think? http://www.kickstarter.com/projects/manusporny/701481070?token=dc84e5a5 -- manu -- Manu Sporny (skype: msporny, twitter: manusporny, G+: +Manu Sporny) Founder/CEO - Digital Bazaar, Inc. blog: Meritora - Web payments commercial launch http://blog.meritora.com/launch/
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