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Re: Preview: KickStarter for Linked Data and Web Payments

From: Manu Sporny <msporny@digitalbazaar.com>
Date: Thu, 16 May 2013 22:23:44 -0400
Message-ID: <519594B0.70106@digitalbazaar.com>
To: Web Payments CG <public-webpayments@w3.org>
On 05/16/2013 05:49 PM, Steven Rowat wrote:
> I think your bulk-of-the-page 'why it's amazing' paragraphs need a 
> more concise lead paragraph.
> 
> And I think you have just the paragraph near the end, which I'd 
> suggest moving up to the 2nd paragraph. Then put a title, 
> "Details/Background" or something, before the rest.

Great suggestions, Steven! I've updated the page to reflect the layout
you suggested. I think it flows much better now, what do you think?

http://www.kickstarter.com/projects/manusporny/701481070?token=dc84e5a5

-- manu

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Founder/CEO - Digital Bazaar, Inc.
blog: Meritora - Web payments commercial launch
http://blog.meritora.com/launch/
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