- From: Ian Jacobs <ij@w3.org>
- Date: Thu, 26 Feb 2015 07:12:03 -0600
- To: Manu Sporny <msporny@digitalbazaar.com>
- Cc: public-webpayments-ig@w3.org
> On Feb 25, 2015, at 10:53 PM, Manu Sporny <msporny@digitalbazaar.com> wrote: > > On 02/25/2015 10:33 PM, Ian Jacobs wrote: >> Just a note that I started to edit that page today: >> https://www.w3.org/Payments/IG/wiki/ExecSummary >> >> I will have a look at your comments tomorrow, Manu, but you may also >> want to have a look at the updates. > > I took a look at the updates in the wiki, and really like the direction. > > I think the first 50% is almost exactly what we want - quick intro, > summary of 1-3 key things we're trying to achieve with brief explanation > of each. Just a note: That’s where I stopped for now. I have notes below but have not made edits. > > Unless we can add more items to "Goals in Pursuit of the Plan" or > "Topics of interest the group but not first priority", I suggest we > convert them into items that sit in the middle section and rename it to > something like "Characteristics of an Ideal Solution". > > "This is what we're doing" is more compelling than "this is what we're > not doing" (even though I struggle to suggest that the latter isn't also > important). > > The message feels like it falls apart a bit toward the end and there is > still no strong close or call to action for the executive summary. > > Will put more thought into it over the next several days as well. Thanks > for the updates Chaals and Ian. Ian > > -- manu > > -- > Manu Sporny (skype: msporny, twitter: manusporny, G+: +Manu Sporny) > Founder/CEO - Digital Bazaar, Inc. > blog: The Marathonic Dawn of Web Payments > http://manu.sporny.org/2014/dawn-of-web-payments/ > > -- Ian Jacobs <ij@w3.org> http://www.w3.org/People/Jacobs Tel: +1 718 260 9447
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