- From: Lacy . Lee <LLacy@drc.com>
- Date: Mon, 12 Jan 2004 16:49:55 -0500
- To: <public-webont-comments@w3.org>
- Message-ID: <AB085580DA7C9F45A251FF83A313DA381D92A9@orls01.drc.com>
Deborah/Frank, The Overview document is looking great and a lot of hard work has paid off in this superb introduction. I'd like to offer some very nitpicky editorial suggestions to help polish this off: Abstract, paragraph 2, fourth sentence, "for a more detailed descriptions" to "for more detailed descriptions" Table of Contents, under section 3, missing "10. OWL Lite Versioning" Section 1.2, XML Schema bullet doesn't mention the XMLS contribution of datatypes to OWL Section 1.3, bullet 2 on OWL DL, "computed" to "computable" Section 1.3, bullet 2 on OWL DL, "decidability" to "decidable" Section 1.3, 2nd to last paragraph, "provided by OWL DL and OWL Full" to "provided by OWL DL" (sentence is discussing choice between Lite and DL) Section 1.3, last paragraph, last sentence, "OWL DL and OWL Lite" to "OWL DL" (referenced appendix doesn't appear to mention OWL Lite) Section 2.1, third column of constructs gets truncated by most printers, reducing column width of first two columns slightly should solve the problem Section 2.1, move rdfs:subClassOf above rdf:Property for consistency with discussion paragraphs that follow Section 2.1, under Header Information, "ontology" to "Ontology" Section 2.1, appears to be missing discussion of OWL constructs: distinctMembers, ObjectProperty, Nothing, Thing, restriction, onProperty Section 2.1, appears to be missing rdf(s) constructs: List, nil, type, Datatype, Literal Section 2.2, first sentence, "addition to those" to "addition to or expand those" (to cover things like intersectionOf which has already been listed in 2.1 Section 2.2, appears to be missing OWL constructs: AnnotationProperty, OntologyProperty Section 2.2, move complementOf above intersectionOf for consistency in discussion that follows Section 3.1., class bullet paragraph, "and a superclass" to "and is a superclass" Section 3.1, class bullet paragraph, "and a subclass" to "and is a subclass" Section 3.1, subClassOf bullet paragraph, "is a Mammal" to "is also a Mammal" Section 3.1, rdfs:domain bullet paragraph, "relates individual" to "relates an individual" Section 3.1, rdfs:domain and rdfs:range bullet paragraphs, "below on local restrictions" to "below on property type restrictions" to match heading Section 3.1, rdfs:range bullet paragraph "i.e., Deborah is the child of Louise," to "(i.e., Deborah is the child of Louise)," Section 3.3., transitive property paragraph, extra carriage return exists after "ancestor)." Section 3.4, title, "Restriction" to "Restrictions" for consistency with table of contents Section 3.7, title, "Datatypes" to "OWL Datatypes" for consistency with table of contents Section 4., title, "FULL" to "Full" References, OWL Test citation, "9" to "15" in date Sorry if these are too nit picky, just trying to help! Lee
Received on Monday, 12 January 2004 16:50:08 UTC