Re: Request for Review of WebID specs before publishing

Disabling a WebID Certificate

missing comma "In the second case having the device"  --> " In the 
second case, having the device"

Access Control Check

spelling "type is access controled" --> "type is access controlled"
comma/missing word "If the request is authorized to anyone then 
server..." --> "If the request is authorized to anyone, then the server..."

Verifying the WebIDs

I would hyperlink "man in the middle attacks" to a URL that would 
explain and define it better in detail.

"Once that is proven then the trust one..."  awkward/unclear. Once what 
is proven exactly?  I read it a couple of times and I am still not sure 
what it is referring to.

Verifying the WebID Claim

comma "In other words one has to check..." --> "In other words, one has 
to check..."

Verifying the WebID Claim with SPARQL

Really long thick sentence: "In order to allow the class of queries 
defined by the template above to return true when asked of graphs where 
the hexBinary or the exponent contains whitespace characters in initial 
and final position, the query engine/must/support the D-entailment 
regime for|xsd:hexBinary|and|xsd:integer|as specified inSPARQL 1.1 
Entailment Regimes <http://www.w3.org/TR/sparql11-entailment/#DEntRegime>."

add some commas at least:

"In order to allow the class of queries, defined by the template above, 
to return true when asked of graphs, where the hexBinary or the exponent 
contains whitespace characters in initial and final position, the query 
engine/must/support the D-entailment regime 
for|xsd:hexBinary|and|xsd:integer|as specified inSPARQL 1.1 Entailment 
Regimes <http://www.w3.org/TR/sparql11-entailment/#DEntRegime>."

or break into two sentences.

Authorization
comma: "Up to this point we are..." --> "Up to this point, we are"
"advanced that with"-->"advanced than with"

         - Erich

On 09/05/13 9:52 AM, Henry Story wrote:
> Dear WebID Community Group,
>
>    we now have three specs up on github here
>
>     https://dvcs.w3.org/hg/WebID/raw-file/tip/spec/index.html
>
> All editors think that it is time to publish a new version
> on the W3C WebID Incubator space, to finalise the distinction
> between WebID, WebID-TLS, and the cert ontology.
>
> So we would like to be able to publish the specs above
> at the following location, by Friday 20 September 2013
>
>    http://www.w3.org/2005/Incubator/webid/spec/
>
> We would be very happy to receive feedback from
> the community before doing so. If you can spot
> any errors or improvements please let us know,
> we'll do our best to get them in before publication.
>
>     Thanks,
>
> 		Henry Story
>
>
> Social Web Architect
> http://bblfish.net/
>
>