Re: [ACTION-501] Federated query review

I applied changes suggested by Alex:

2011/8/9 Alexandre Passant <alexandre.passant@deri.org>

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> * TOC
> - Appendix C1 to be removed
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done

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> * 2 (intro):
> - You use "SPARQL protocol service" but in the rest of the document,
> "SPARQL endpoint". Is that the same thing ? If so, that should should be
> replaced, if not "protocol service" should be explained. Similarly, in 2.2
> you use *service* ("Data in the default graph at service:
> http://people.example.org/sparql") and in 2.3 *endpoint* (Data in <
> http://people.example.org/sparql> endpoint). This is the only major
> concern I have with the current spec but I think that should be fixed.
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changed all to remote SPARQL endpoint

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> * 2.1
> - "and we want to combine it with my local FOAF file". I'd rather use
> neutral pronouns. "one wants to combine with a local FOAF file". That's a
> general remark to avoid the use of "we" that sounds too tutorial-ish too me.
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done

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> * 2.2
> - "Data in <http://people.example.org/sparql> endpoint". Endpoint URL
> should be in <code>
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done

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> * 2.4.
> -  for all foaf:Persons. Put the "s" outside the <code>, or better,
> replace by "instances of foaf:Person"
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replaced by instances of foaf:Person

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> * 4
> - "DOAP vocabulary" . Add an hyperlink of reference.
> - "  void:sparqlEndpoint ?service " I think there's a . missing here
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done

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> --
> Dr. Alexandre Passant,
> Social Software Unit Leader
> Digital Enterprise Research Institute,
> National University of Ireland, Galway
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