Re: comments on "OWL 2 Web Ontology Language Primer"

Dear Bob,

Thanks for reporting these issues and the careful proofreading. Based on your suggestions we have made a few amendments in [1]; the diff is [2].

[1] http://www.w3.org/2007/OWL/wiki/Primer
[2] http://www.w3.org/2007/OWL/wiki/index.php?title=Primer&diff=26391&oldid=26390

Please let me know in case this does not address your concerns.

Regards,
Sebastian Rudolph
on behalf of the W3C OWL Working Group


> Overall it's very good, and I learned a lot. I'm suggesting potential 
> areas for improvement here, most of which are just picky copy-editing 
> things that will count as editorial errata. Sorry that it's coming so 
> long after the Recommendation, but I figured that it was better late 
> than never.
> 
> thanks,
> 
> Bob DuCharme
> 
> ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
> 
> In the Abstract: "...should be read before other OWL 2 documents" would 
> be better off referring to "other documents describing OWL 2" because 
> section 8.2 provides a very specific meaning for the term "OWL document" 
> that doesn't fit with the wording here.
> 
> Section 4.3 word usage problem "it can be excluded that there is an 
> individual" (did it mean "it can be inferred"?)
> 
> 4.8 word usage problem "and via their relatedness to other individuals" 
> (and via their relationships)
> 
> 5.2 word usage problem "are allowed to by kind of self-referential" If 
> this means "be kind of self-referential," that's a little better, but 
> don't say "kind of"--either it's self-referential or it's not.
> 
> 5.2 word usage problem "hasChild is class member of any class" hasChild 
> is *a* class member of any class?
> 
> 5.3 word usage problem "we can say something about all respectively at 
> least one of somebody's children"
> 
> 8.2 "and also can use XML entities for namespaces." To be correct, it's 
> actually using entity references, not entities, for namespace prefixes, 
> and it's important to be correct here because it looks like "entity" has 
> a very specific meaning in OWL 2 (e.g. in the section right after this 
> one, "8.3 Entity Declarations") that has nothing to do with the concept 
> of XML entities. In fact, the use of XML entity references in this 
> document is confusing and adds nothing to the document or to the sample 
> ontology. I realize that they're used to provide flexibility in which 
> prefix represents which URL,  but doing so in this document sacrifices 
> some simplicity that a Primer should not sacrifice. It would be better 
> to remove them all and just say rdfs: instead of &rdfs; (etc.) throughout.
> 
> 10 word usage problem "By and large, different profiles can be 
> distinguished syntactically with there being inclusion relations between 
> various profiles." (with the use of inclusion relations between various 
> profiles?)
> 
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