Re: [Media] MAUR Comments from Cognitive TF 1 of 2

My plan is to just apply these edits from the Cognitive Task Force unless
there are any objections?

On Thu, Nov 20, 2014 at 12:44 PM, Janina Sajka <janina@rednote.net> wrote:

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> From: "Rochford, John" <john.rochford@umassmed.edu>
> To: "lisa.seeman" <lisa.seeman@zoho.com>, public-cognitive-a11y-tf <
> public-cognitive-a11y-tf@w3.org>
> Cc:
> Date: Thu, 20 Nov 2014 16:00:12 +0000
> Subject: RE: Needed urgent review ....Fwd: Cognitive Section in the MAUR
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> Hi Lisa and All,
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> My comments:
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> 1)       Sentence beginning with “Cognitive and …”
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> a. Cognitive disabilities are neurological disabilities.
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> ·  Suggestion: Change “Cognitive and neurological disabilities …” to
> “Cognitive disabilities …”.
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> b. All of the references are to cause/disability disorders except for
> “memory impairments”.
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> ·  Suggestion: Remove “memory impairments” from the list. It is common to
> all of the disorders listed anyway.
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> 2)       Sentence beginning with “Individuals with …”
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> a. It is not just that “…information that is presented as text embedded
> in a video should also be available as audio descriptions …”. Text
> anywhere, such as in web pages, should be available aurally.
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> b. Suggestion: Change to “… information presented as text should be
> available aurally, including audio descriptions embedded in videos …”.
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> 3)       Sentence beginning with “Some conditions …”
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> a. The reference to “…multi-system effects …” is confusing to me. I don’t
> know what that means.
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> ·  Suggestion: Reword/clarify.
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> b. This is a run-on sentence.
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> ·  Suggestion: Divide into two sentences, i.e. “Some conditions, such as
> autism-spectrum disorders, may have multi-system effects. Individuals may
> need a combination of different accommodation.”
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> c. I believe the reference to “accommodation” should be plural.
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> · Suggestion: Change to “accommodations”.
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> John
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> John Rochford
> UMass Medical School/E.K. Shriver Center
> Director, INDEX Program
> Instructor, Family Medicine & Community Health
> http://www.DisabilityInfo.org <http://www.disabilityinfo.org/>
> Twitter: @ClearHelper
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> *From:* lisa.seeman [mailto:lisa.seeman@zoho.com]
> *Sent:* Thursday, November 20, 2014 9:56 AM
> *To:* public-cognitive-a11y-tf
> *Subject:* Needed urgent review ....Fwd: Cognitive Section in the MAUR
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> We have been asked to review the "Media Accessibility User Requirements
> (MAUR)"
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> document
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> Can we try and review it as soon as possible and check  the section about
> Cognitive in the MAUR:
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> https://rawgit.com/w3c/pfwg/WD-media-accessibility-reqs-20140717/media-accessibility-reqs/index.html#cognitive-and-neurological-disabilities
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> They are  soon finalizing it so if we have comments we need to make them
> as soon as possible
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> All the best
> Lisa
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