Re: ADMS review

Thank you very much James.

I'll endeavour to act on these before Thursday.

Phil.

On 07/04/2013 21:43, James McKinney wrote:
> Here's a first review that doesn't go into the domain model.
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> 1. Small fixes:
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> * xml -> XML
> * data set -> dataset
> * anad -> and
> * 'a document' -> a document (without quotes)
> * Semantic Interoperability -> Semantic interoperability (lowercase "i")
> * consuption -> consumption
> * a few missing periods at the ends of paragraphs
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> 2. I find the document's first sentence to be a much clearer description of semantic assets than the introduction's first sentence. Can we simply re-use the clearer sentence?
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> 3. Most of the introduction is actually about explaining why we have ADMS when we already have DCAT. Perhaps this can be moved to a new "Rationale" section, maybe as a subsection of "Vocabulary Overview"?
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> 4. Add an "Acknowledgements" header for the three "The original development of ADMS ...", "ADMS was first developed by PwC EU Services ...", and "This version of ADMS ..." paragraphs, and perhaps move it to the end of the document, like in ORG.
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> 5. Add a "Conformance" header before "A data interchange, however that interchange occurs, ..." and move this section before Namespaces.
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> 6. It's unusual that the terms described in the Terminology section are never used elsewhere, i.e. "Semantic interoperability" and "Semantic interoperability asset". We use "semantic asset" everywhere, which is defined in the introduction, but it is never said whether it is a synonym of "semantic interoperability asset". Do we need this section?
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> 7. If the above changes are made, the Introduction will be very short. I would move the "Vocabulary Overview" into the introduction (it makes sense to do an overview as early as possible in the document). Here's a possible table of contents, in which I also move "Namespaces" down, closer to the reference "Properties and Relationships" section:
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> 1. Abstract
> 2. Vocabulary Overview
> 2.1. Terminology
> 2.2. Rationale
> 2.3. Example
> 3. ADMS Domain Model
> 3.1. Primary Concepts
> 3.2. Secondary Concepts
> 4. Conformance
> 5. Namespaces
> 6. Properties and Relationships
> 7. Acknowledgements
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> James
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