RE: Feedback on COGA Design Principle "Use Chunks"

Hi Glenda,

These are my suggestions for improvement. Feel free to ignore them.

  *   Don’t use nonliteral text such as “Break down walls of words”.
  *   Remove the reference to the Hemingway Editor because:
     *   I don’t think we should be perceived as endorsing a tool; and
     *   I don’t know of any empirical evidence it produces text that is significantly easier to understand than typical text.
  *   In the Benefits section, consistently refer to functional issues. (The first two list items do and are specific – great!)
  *   Consider not using images of text even with URLs to the original sources. I could not enlarge the images sufficiently to view them. I could open the “Before” URL and read the page’s content, but I could not open the “After” URL.

Thank you for doing this valuable work. Welcome to the COGA TF!

John

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UMass Medical School/E.K. Shriver Center
Director, INDEX Program
Faculty, Family Medicine & Community Health
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From: Glenda Sims <glenda.sims@deque.com>
Sent: Sunday, June 17, 2018 8:34 PM
To: public-cognitive-a11y-tf <public-cognitive-a11y-tf@w3.org>
Subject: Feedback on COGA Design Principle "Use Chunks"

Howdy COGA,

I volunteered to draft some content for the COGA Design Principle "Use Chunks".  Version 1 of my draft can be seen here:

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1WcfVALVq8PS9CLXUuAfV9Op0wXvI2yJYedj5jO23GTk/edit#heading=h.7zcg54sq08g3<https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=https-3A__docs.google.com_document_d_1WcfVALVq8PS9CLXUuAfV9Op0wXvI2yJYedj5jO23GTk_edit-23heading-3Dh.7zcg54sq08g3&d=DwMFaQ&c=WJBj9sUF1mbpVIAf3biu3CPHX4MeRjY_w4DerPlOmhQ&r=CueeOhb9CA5L2yfl16hThwCe1zS5LdHYD5MikPNgKr4&m=11VTYy2cxMwPZnVWrhOLRjGUYBzjAdA-emn6ueoFmIA&s=234wVEYuNDL_l5Mt7MKmUMur4nqSRRZIJUBvrATXXpQ&e=>

I'd love to hear your feedback.  Am I on the right track?  How could what I've written be improved?

Thanks tons,
g

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