RE: Reaching a final version of Addendum to BPWG

Hi Jo,

Hi Jo,

Thanks a bunch for the pointers.  It is apparent that you used to do
this professionally :-)

I have made the changes indicated, to save you some work, and corrected
a few inconsistent indentations and capitalizations as well.
I have attached a new version of the document, which also contains fixes
to a couple of other problems that had been pointed out previously.

But do please check the document and let me know if there are any
further stylistic faux pas that you might spot :-)
I can make the changes probably more quickly than you can at this time.

-- Kai





> -----Original Message-----
> From: Jo Rabin [mailto:jrabin@mtld.mobi] 
> Sent: Monday, September 21, 2009 7:02 PM
> To: Scheppe, Kai-Dietrich
> Cc: Phil Archer; Public MWBP
> Subject: Re: Reaching a final version of Addendum to BPWG
> 
> Hi Kai
> 
> 
> In answer to your question below:
> 
>  > Quoting from my message from the 7th:
>  > "For example, I have normalized all bullet point lists 
> that use  > something like a sentence to using a period at 
> the end and capital  > letters in the beginning. We had a mix 
> of Jo's ; and lower case  > notation, . and lower case and 
> the . and upper case notations. I prefer  > the latter method."
>  >
>  > Do you see the inconsistency in the difference between 
> bullets with a  > couple of words and those with full sentences?
>  > Please explain.  If it is the former, I will take 
> editorial license and  > leave it.
>  > If there are truly inconsitencies, please point them out 
> as I am, by  > now, blind to them.
> 
> It's probably way easier if I just fix it up where I spot it. 
> Can I edit the currently posted draft?
> 
> 3.9, 3.10, 3.18, 3.19, 3.20 and 3.31
> 
> Sorry about this but I spotted another typo:
> 
> 3.26 Style Sheets Size
> 
> Relevant Delivery Context Capabilities
> 
> Verify that style sheets do not contain more than 25% white 
> space Verify that all style rules are used somewhere in the Web site
> 
> The heading should be "Evaluation Procedure" I think.
> 
> Cheers
> Jo
> 
> 
> 
> On 16/09/2009 16:19, Scheppe, Kai-Dietrich wrote:
> > Hi Jo,
> > 
> > Thanks for your input.  Answers in the text.
> > File will follow.
> > 
> > -- Kai
> > 
> > 
> > 
> >> I have only a couple of very minor observations.
> >>
> >> 1) the punctuation used to end bullets and numbered lists is not 
> >> consistent (the predominant style seems to be to end with a ".")
> > 
> > Quoting from my message from the 7th:
> > "For example, I have normalized all bullet point lists that use 
> > something like a sentence to using a period at the end and capital 
> > letters in the beginning. We had a mix of Jo's ; and lower case 
> > notation, . and lower case and the . and upper case notations. I 
> > prefer the latter method."
> > 
> > Do you see the inconsistency in the difference between 
> bullets with a 
> > couple of words and those with full sentences?
> > Please explain.  If it is the former, I will take editorial license 
> > and leave it.
> > If there are truly inconsitencies, please point them out as 
> I am, by 
> > now, blind to them.
> > 
> > 
> > 
> >> 2) Under "Evaluation" the formula "Verify that" is used pretty 
> >> consistently up to about 3.8. After that it seems to
> > 
> > <snip>
> >  
> >> I think the document would actually benefit from a small amount of 
> >> tidying up in that area - maybe to use "verify that" throughout.
> > 
> > Good catch. 3.23 has been reformulated and the rest of the document 
> > has been adapted.
> > 
> > 
> >> 3) the names of elements and attributes might benefit from <code> 
> >> treatment.
> > 
> > Yes, I agree.  It has been done.
> > Furthermore, all references to a specific elements have 
> been placed in 
> > <> and code style
> > 
> > 
> >> 4) Capitalization of some of the sub-heads e.g. Use of 
> color => Use 
> >> of Color, Examples of informal evaluation => Examples of Informal 
> >> Evaluation
> > 
> > Done.  
> > Examples of informal evaluation has been reduced to 
> Examples, which is 
> > the general pattern.
> > 
> > 
> >  
> >> I'd offer to do something on this but have my work cut out 
> trying to 
> >> do a new draft of CT by next week.
> > 
> > 
> > No need. It's done.
>