- From: David W. Morris <dwm@xpasc.com>
- Date: Sun, 23 Nov 1997 22:37:53 -0800 (PST)
- To: http working group <http-wg%cuckoo.hpl.hp.com@hplb.hpl.hp.com>
As I reviewed the new draft, I noted a few editorial comments which
follow:
1. In several places ``X'' is used, sometimes in the same paragraph
with "X". It seemed strange to use two different forms of double
quoting. I think it would be better to stick with one form.
2. In the first paragraph of section "3. STATE AND SESSIONS", the
phrase "the technique" implies a reference to a technique which
hasn't been defined. And in fact, the phrase could refer to
either the new proposal OR the 'existing' methodology.
I was also uncomfortable with the word "currently" since Netscape
cookies have been in use now for a long time and most readers would
consider the current time frame to include Netscape cookies.
Perhaps replace "Currently, HTTP servers" with "HTTP servers
conforming to RFC 2068"
3. I believe "4. Outline" and the introductory phrase "We outline" was
already noted by Roy and acknowledged.
4. In the same section 4 introductory paragraph, I agree with the
suggestion already made that most of the paragraph could just be
deleted (keep 1st two sentences). The reference to CGI programs
should be deleted in any case.
5. In 4.2.1 I think it would be better to drop the first parenthetic
note which attempts to differentiate persistent connections from
the term session. At least drop the first sentence and change
"should have no effect" to "has no effect".
6. In 4.2.2, in the description of NAME=VALUE, it is redundant to
say "$ are reserved" and "for other users". Drop the second part.
7. In 4.3.3, the phrase "then gets discarded" isn't needed. The
cookie persists until X happens is sufficient.
8. I don't see the need for the restriction stated in the last sentence
of section 4.5:
Proxies must not introduce Set-Cookie2 (Cookie) headers of their
own in proxy responses (requests).
I'd rather have this dropped completely but if not, then change must
to should.
Dave Morris
Received on Sunday, 23 November 1997 22:40:16 UTC