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editorial corrections to Primer PR

From: Frank Manola <fmanola@acm.org>
Date: Fri, 09 Jan 2004 17:33:42 -0500
Message-ID: <3FFF2C46.7090507@acm.org>
To: w3c-rdfcore-wg@w3.org

I've just made a pass through the Primer PR and have discovered a few 
editorial nits that should be corrected:

*  in the TOC, sections 5.1 and 5.2 need to have "Defining" replaced by 
"Describing" to be consistent with the actual section titles.

*  in Section 2.2, there are two instances of "example.com" that need to 
be changed to "example.org" to be consistent with the overall example

*  in Section 3.3, there's an "is" in the last sentence that should be 
"are".

*  in Section 5.1, Figure 18 is upside down (class MotorVehicle should 
be at the top, not the bottom).  This was fixed early last year in 
response to a comment from PPS, but somehow an earlier version of the 
figure got loaded into TR space and I missed it.  This is just a matter 
of re-uploading the corrected figure.

*  in Section 6.1, just above Example 32, there's a reference to Example 
  30 that should be a reference to Example 31.

*  in the References, the [LBASE] reference has the right URL but the 
wrong date (it should cite the 10 October 2003 version).

How should these changes be handled?

--Frank

[NB:  Now that I'm re-reading the Primer with a relatively "fresh" eye, 
I've found lots of places that could have been written better, but I'm 
steadfastly refraining from suggesting any further changes.  Enough 
already!  Nevertheless, I really think the above fixes should be made.]
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