Re: Latest primer

Comments from section 1 and 2 - section 3 comments will follow shortly:

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1.1 Structure

From:
"Section 5 described the use of WS-CDL within an organization"
To:
"Section 5 describes the use of WS-CDL within an organization"


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2 An Intro

General note: I think that para 3 should be the first para in this section, 
with the current para's 1 and 2 being moved further down (not necessarily as 
2nd/3rd, but probably lower).

1st para:
From:
" To have them would require them to be somewhere and that somewhere would 
be, by definition, a centralization point. "
To:
" To have them would require them centralized storage and orchestration. " 
????

2nd para:
From:
" All that WS-CDl described is the ordering rules "
To:
" All that WS-CDL describes is the ordering rules "

2nd para:
From:
" against the WS-CDl description regardless of how they may be derived. "
To:
" against the WS-CDL description. "

4th para:
From:
" The distinction between SOA and Web Services is that the latter has its 
interface described using WSDL whereas the latter may not. "
To:
" The distinction between SOA and Web Services is that the latter has its 
interface described using WSDL whereas SOA may not. "

5th para:
From:
" Common collaborative observable behavior is the phrase we use to indicate 
describe the behavior of a system of services "
To:
" Common collaborative observable behavior is the phrase we use to describe 
the behavior of a system of services "

5th para:
From:
" describe the valid sequences of functions that cannot be done with WSDL or 
Java alone "
To:
" describe the valid sequences of functions, which is not possible with WSDL 
or Java alone "

5th para: Not sure what the sentence " This level of "observable behavior" 
does not describe the order in which functions may be used. " is referring 
to - what level?

7th para:
From:
" In effect it described the services "
To:
" In effect it describes the services "

2.1 Using WS-CDL

1st para:
From:
" we might also refer to this a business protocols within "
To:
" we might also refer to this as business protocols within "

2nd para:
Might be worth referring to SOA "behavioral" goverance, as this seems to be 
heating up as a topic.

3rd para:
Need vertical standards from domains other than finance.


2.2 Why use WS-CDL

1st para:
From:
" to lower interoperability issues, such as downtime, and "
To:
" to lower interoperability issues, and "



----- Original Message ----- 
From: "Steve Ross-Talbot" <steve@pi4tech.com>
To: "'WS-Choreography List'" <public-ws-chor@w3.org>; "Monica J Martin" 
<monica.martin@sun.com>
Sent: Tuesday, January 31, 2006 10:45 PM
Subject: Fwd: Latest primer



Primer up to and including section 3 for review, comments and
suggestions as to how to make it read better.

If anyone needs the XML instead of the html Yves can supply it.


Cheers

Steve T

Begin forwarded message:

> From: Yves Lafon <ylafon@w3.org>
> Date: 31 January 2006 21:58:35 GMT
> To: Steve Ross-Talbot <steve@pi4tech.com>
> Subject: Re: Latest primer
>
> On Tue, 31 Jan 2006, Steve Ross-Talbot wrote:
>
>> Including a png diagram.
>
> Online right now at
> http://www.w3.org/2002/ws/chor/edcopies/primer/primer.html
>
>>
>> Cheers
>>
>> Steve T
>>
>>
>
> -- 
> Yves Lafon - W3C
> "Baroula que barouleras, au tiéu toujou t'entourneras."
>
>

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