Comments for PR-xml-names11-20031105

Hello,

These are minor editorial comments for your Namespaces in XML 1.1
Proposed Recommendation [1]. It's beautifully done.

It would be 10k smaller if you can run it through Tidy with indent
off.

Some definitions have an extra space (this may or may not matter).
For example: default. ] and specification. ]

In 3, s/[RFC2141]is/[RFC2141] is/

In 7 first sentence, XML 1.1 specification can link to the XML 1.1 spec.

In 8, s/it it not/it is not/

In 9 and A, is there a reason to reference [Unicode 3.2]? Just in case,
the Unicode Consortium has Citations and References guides near the
bottom of [2].

In A, s/REF 2119/RFC 2119/

In A, you could mention the publishers, for example:
- IRI draft is an Internet-Draft published by The Internet Society
   (I believe).
- Requirements is a W3C Working Draft "work in progress."
- XML is a W3C Recommendation.
The Manual of Style has some suggestions and an example [3].

For E, W3C has an XML Core Working Group but no XML Working Group.
W3C has an XML Plenary Interest Group and an XML Schema Interest Group,
but no Special Interest Group (unless these were before I learned
about W3C, in which case sorry). W3C has Working Groups, Interest
Groups, and Coordination Groups [4]. Maybe you could say "participants
in the World Wide Web Consortium XML Activity's Working Groups" (I am
not sure).

[1] http://www.w3.org/TR/2003/PR-xml-names11-20031105/
[2] http://www.unicode.org/unicode/standard/versions/
[3] http://www.w3.org/2001/06/manual/#References
[4] http://www.w3.org/2003/06/Process-20030618/groups.html#GAGeneral

Best wishes for your project,
-- 
Susan Lesch           http://www.w3.org/People/Lesch/
mailto:lesch@w3.org               tel:+1.858.483.4819
World Wide Web Consortium (W3C)    http://www.w3.org/

Received on Saturday, 6 December 2003 00:08:11 UTC