- From: Jean-Jacques Moreau <jean-jacques.moreau@crf.canon.fr>
- Date: Wed, 03 Nov 2004 13:05:40 +0100
- To: David Booth <dbooth@w3.org>
- Cc: www-ws-desc@w3.org, Kevin <kevin.liu@sap.com>
This is great and very enjoyable up to (and including) section 2.2. Section 2.3 suddenly drops the very nice step-by-step approach and presents al the topics in one go. Section 2.4 discusses somewhat boring namespaces. Section 2.5 and following start with "types" and gradually build-up to higher-level elements. In order to sustain the reader's interest throughout, I'd suggest the following changes: 1) Move sections 2.3 and 2.4 to a later part of the document. 2) Start in section 2.5 with operations. This would provide a better link with the introductory sections and the chosen example. Up to that point, the reader is primarily interested in the "CheckAvailability" operation and how that can be described. 3) Section 2.6 would go from operations to messages, using again "CheckAvailability" as an example. 4) Section 2.7 would provide the link with types for the above messages. 5) Section 2.8 would introduce a simple binding for "CheckAvailability". 6) Section 2.9 would add an endpoint for "CheckAvailability". 5) Section 2.10 and following would provide further refinements: interfaces, services, faults, MEPs. I feel these additional topics should (and can) be avoided in the previous sections, in the interest of simplicity and readability. Introducing too many concepts at once is always a hard sell. I hope this helps, Jean-Jacques. David Booth wrote: > In accordance with the WG's previous feedback, Kevin and I have been > reworking the primer. It isn't done yet, but we've redrafted enough > of the beginning sections that I think you can get a pretty good feel > for the new approach. (We've now put an example right up front, and > the prose then walks through that example, explaining it.) > > If other WG members could take a look and tell us what you think I'd > appreciate it: > http://dev.w3.org/cvsweb/~checkout~/2002/ws/desc/wsdl20/wsdl20-primer.html > >
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