- From: Norman Walsh <ndw@nwalsh.com>
- Date: Wed, 13 Feb 2008 14:41:16 -0500
- To: www-tag@w3.org
- Message-ID: <m27ih8lk4j.fsf@nwalsh.com>
Here are my comments:
* The third bullet in the list at the start of the preface should refer
to "Functions and Operators" not "Data Model", I think.
* I think the phrase "and many other uses..." at the end of the last bullet
should come after the list, not as part of that bullet.
* The sentence in section 2 that begins "Here's an expanded example of the
DocBook model above..." seems to end abruptly with "using [N3], with two ."
* In the last paragraph of section 2, just before section 3, there seems
to be something wrong with the following sentence: "On the one hand
we have...one for the purpose of normative, and the non-normative reference."
* I think the first paragraph of section 4 is a bit hard to parse. Maybe
it could be reworded?
* In the middle of the first paragraph of section 4.2, "Some namespaces in
this category already do this, for example t." seems like something got
dropped.
Ship it!
Be seeing you,
norm
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