Re: new version of Passwords

/ Vincent Quint <> was heard to say:
| Thanks to Ed, a new version of the draft TAG finding Passwords in the Clear
| is available for review at

Looks good, Ed. Only one substantive comment: didn't we agree to
replace the Yankee Group reference with something more generic?

The rest are editorial nits:

s/about the user of/about the use of/
s/and the needs to/and the need to/
s/display, temporary/display and temporary/
s/When passwords are/When a password is/
s/some external secure systems/some external security systems/
s/any organization who wishes/any organization that wishes/
s/customers data/customer's data/
s/secure transfers of/secure transfer of/
s/prevent the user of/prevent the use of/
s/developed by Netscape/developed by Netscape,/

I'm not sure how to parse "While SSL/TLS secures SOAP bases messages
point to point" perhaps s/bases //?

s/your using/you're using/
s/SOAP package/SOAP message/ (just for consistency)
s/WS_Security/WS Security/

Is "message level Security' capitalized correctly? And note the
missmatched quotes.

s/stop some from/stop someone from/

The cross references to references use superscripted numbers, but the
numbers don't actually appear in the references.

                                        Be seeing you,

Norman Walsh
XML Standards Architect
Sun Microsystems, Inc.

Received on Tuesday, 10 October 2006 16:45:14 UTC