- From: Shawn Henry <shawn@w3.org>
- Date: Mon, 16 Sep 2019 10:43:33 -0500
- To: Shadi Abou-Zahra <shadi@w3.org>
- Cc: "wai-eo-editors@w3.org" <wai-eo-editors@w3.org>
Hi Shadi, On 9/16/2019 10:34 AM, Shadi Abou-Zahra wrote: > Hi Shawn, > > > On 16/09/2019 17:24, Shawn Henry wrote: >> Hi Shadi, >> >> On 9/16/2019 1:37 AM, Shadi Abou-Zahra wrote: >>> Hi Shawn, >>> >>> >>> On 13/09/2019 17:30, Shawn Henry wrote: >>>> Thanks, Shadi! >>>> >>>> replies below: >>>> >>>> On 9/12/2019 11:06 PM, Shadi Abou-Zahra wrote: >>>>> Hi Shawn, >>>>> >>>>> Many thanks for your extensive and helpful comments. I addressed most of them in the latest update. Some issues are on the agenda for discussion. Below are some responses to specific comments: >>>>> >>>>> >>>>> On 13/09/2019 03:27, Shawn Henry via WBS Mailer wrote: >>>>> [SNIP] >>>>>>> --------------------------------- >>>>>>> Video 1: Evaluation Overview >>>>> [SNIP] >>>>>> 6: "Even if you are new to web accessibility and non-technical…" >>>>>> -> "Even if you are new to web accessibility and not technical…" >>>>>> Also, I wonder about "new to accessibility"? … so maybe: >>>>>> -> "Even if you don't know anything about web accessibility yet and you're >>>>>> not technical…" >>>>> >>>>> I don't like "don't know anything". Hardly anyone coming here would not know anything about accessibility. Do you have other suggestions? >>>> >>>> Good point. Maybe "don't know much"? >>> >>> It would then read "Even if you don't know much about web accessibility and you're non-technical, there are several checks you can do to get a rough idea of the accessibility." -- I can live with that but find it a little long and clunky. What is wrong with "Even if you are new to"? >> I'm guessing (only guessing) that there are many people who would consider themselves not "new to accessibility" yet think they don't have the knowledge to evaluate accessibility at all -- and thus are the target audiences for this sentence. For example, I'm thinking of a high-level manager I know. He's known about accessibility for 10+ years, but not done much directly himself (because he's been at management level that long). If you asked him: "Are you new to accessibility", he'd say, "No, I've known about it for years." If you asked him, "Can you check a web page and tell if there are any accessibility problems with it, he'd say, "No, I don't know enough about it." So he's they type of person we want to tell: "Actually, yes you can!" :-) > > Would that manager consider themself as "don't know much/anything"? "Don't know anything" - No, he knows something. "Don't know much" - Yes. > > >> But really, this is minor, and I'm OK with "new to" if you want and others didn't comment on it. :-) > > I don't feel strongly at all, just weighing out cost versus benefit. > > >> Also note that elsewhere I suggest "not technical" instead of "non-technical". I feel a bit more strongly about that. :-) > > Changed. > > >>>>> [SNIP] >>>>>> 6: "… get a rough [idea] of how well you are doing." >>>>>> -> "… get a rough [idea] of the accessibility of a web page." >>>>>> R: We imagine that people use Easy Checks to check *other* pages besides >>>>>> their own. >>>>>> Note: You say the in the Easy Checks video. If you want to leave this one >>>>>> as is for flow, I'm totally fine with that. >>>>> >>>>> How about "get a rough idea of the accessibility" only? >>>> >>>> yup, OK. >>>> (that might not be sufficient stand alone -- would need another word after accessibility (e.g., the accessibility barriers or the accessibility status or such) -- yet I think fine in context) >>> >>> It would actually need to be "some of the accessibility aspects" or such, which I mildly think is unnecessarily long. What do you think? >> >> /me goes back and re-reads <https://www.w3.org/WAI/EO/wiki/Video-Based_Resources/Evaluation_Introduction> ... >> * "Even if you are new to web accessibility and non-technical, there are several checks you can do to get a rough idea of the accessibility." >> * "Sometimes doing only a few checks can still give you a general idea of the accessibility." >> >> It's just feels off to me. >> /me asks her local grammar guru to read the sentences... he thinks it's fine. >> >> I guess OK to leave it -- yet please be on the lookout for if anyone else notes it. > > Same as above -- I don't feel strongly but prefer the simplicity. My grammar guru came back into my office a bit ago, and said, "ya know, it does need another something". I said, "Too late, I already sent the e-mail." But now I have another chance. ;-) You know I'm big on simplicity! Yet think the awkwardness of it is likely worse overall. Maybe ask others in EOWG -- especially native speakers? (I don't think most people have reviewed that wording yet?) > > >> (/me had a couple things like that with the recent media review. When only one person noted it, I left it -- but when a second person noted it, I rewrote it. :-) > > Yup... > > >>>>> [SNIP] >>>>>>> --------------------------------- >>>>>>> Video 2: Preliminary Evaluation >>>>> [SNIP] >>>>>> 2: "Even if you are new to web accessibility and non-technical, you can do >>>>>> some easy checks to get a rough impression of the accessibility of any web >>>>>> page." >>>>>> [See comments on Overview video script] >>>>> >>>>> ACK (keeping a tab on this comment for later edits). >>>>> >>>>> [SNIP] >>>>>> 7: "…can still give you a general idea of how well you are doing." >>>>>> -> "…can still give you a general idea of how well a page addresses >>>>>> accessibility." >>>>>> R: May be doing the checks on a vendor, competitor, or other site/ >>>>> >>>>> Using "of the accessibility", in line with the prior edits. >>> >>> (keeping tab on comments on sequences 2 and 7 above) >>> >>> >>>>> [SNIP] >>>>>> 9: "The first step to accessibility is understanding where you are" >>>>>> This not feeling tight For one thing, that assumes checking own website, >>>>>> whereas we're saying "webpage from your own website, from your competitor, >>>>>> or from vendors you might want to work with." Another point is we usually >>>>>> say get a basic understanding of accessibility first (ideally anyway) – >>>>>> e.g., https://www.w3.org/WAI/planning/interim-repairs/ says "If you are >>>>>> new to accessibility, it is often helpful to first get a basic >>>>>> understanding of accessibility:" True that then it goes into "Identify the >>>>>> Issues". >>>>> >>>>> Changed to: "With Easy Checks, you can get started right away with finding some of the accessibility barriers." >>>> >>>> good! ... actually: >>>> - second "with": "With Easy Checks, you can get started right away finding some of the accessibility barriers." >>>> could - "of the": "With Easy Checks, you can get started right away finding some accessibility barriers." >>>> >>>> hummm.. "finding barriers" is assuming there are barriers, and maybe not good to say that way? >>>> maybe: "With Easy Checks, you can get started right away checking if there are some accessibility barriers." >>>> perhaps: "With Easy Checks, you can get started right away checking for some accessibility barriers." >>>> perhaps: "With Easy Checks, you can get started right away checking some accessibility issues." >>> >>> Changed to "With Easy Checks, you can get started right away doing some accessibility checks." >>> >>> Wondering if it now needs the second "with" back? Ie. "With Easy Checks, you can get started right away with doing some accessibility checks."? >> Definitely not have the second "with". >> >> Thanks for thoughtful considerations of my input. > > Thank you for your thoughtful comments :-) Thank you for your thank you for my thank your for... ah, I've lost my place. ;-) ~Shawn > > Best, > Shadi >
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