- From: Shadi Abou-Zahra <shadi@w3.org>
- Date: Thu, 21 Apr 2016 09:21:09 +0200
- To: jgreen@visa.com
- Cc: wai-eo-editors <wai-eo-editors@w3.org>
Hi James, On 21.4.2016 04:39, James Green via WBS Mailer wrote: > I can tell this took a lot of work and there is valuable information > included, but I am sad to say that it needs a lot of work. > > It does use shorter paragraphs with headings (which is good) but still > needs visuals. And more importantly, I think it misses the mark we > discussed Friday. I could see academics linking to this, but not your > average interested party. It needs simple, succinct language to motivate > users to stick with it. > > Currently, this resource has a Flesch-Kincaid Reading Ease score of 15.2 > (well into college graduate level language) and an average grade level > (among 5 different formulas) of 16.5. I ran those tests against a few > other WAI pages and never got anything below grade 14. To me, this > resource is definitely consistent with what we have, but I don't think it > represents where we want to be when it comes to developing new resources > going forward.... Thank you for these suggestions. I will try to further improve the text and writing level. It would be helpful if you have specific suggestions or examples of how to improve the language. Also for visuals. A Venn diagram was suggested, though I'm not sure if that will actually make things easier or more difficult. Do you have other suggestions and ideas for visuals? Thanks, Shadi -- Shadi Abou-Zahra - http://www.w3.org/People/shadi/ Activity Lead, WAI International Program Office W3C Web Accessibility Initiative (WAI)
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