- From: Kevin White <kevin@w3.org>
- Date: Thu, 23 Oct 2014 22:04:54 +0100
- To: Bim Egan <bim.egan1@gmail.com>
- Cc: wai-eo-editors@w3.org
Hi Bim, I have incorporated your suggested edits. Thanks, Kevin On 22 Oct 2014, at 18:31, Bim Egan <bim.egan1@gmail.com> wrote: > Hi, > > Here are a few copy edit suggestions for the Developing Organizational Policies on Web Accessibility document: > > Under the H2, Reference Standards and Define Conformance Level > H3 What to include, first list item: > Text: • Reference to latest ... > Suggest: • Reference to the latest ... > > Under the H2, Reference Standards and Define Conformance Level > H3 Other considerations, first list item: > Text: • Reference to latest ... > Suggest: • Reference to the latest ... > > Under the H2, Reference Standards and Define Conformance Level > H3 Examples, second example: > Text: ...internal use, conform all Level A criteria ... ... > Suggest: ...internal use, conform to all Level A success criteria ... ... > > Under the H2, Set Conformance Milestones, second paragraph, third sentence: > Text: A phased approach might first rapidly addressing significant and insurmountable barriers, then implementing ... > Suggestion: A phased approach might first rapidly address significant and insurmountable barriers, then implement... > > Under the H2, Example Policies: > There are a few instances where the verb conform and the noun conformance are used in the same sentence. > Suggest: removing "conformance" if "conform" is used in the same sentence. (Might need a little word tweaking for fluency). > > > Brilliant document, very useful and well presented. I've already bookmarked it. > > That's it, > > Bim > > > >
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