- From: Jennifer Sutton <jsuttondc@gmail.com>
- Date: Wed, 26 May 2010 08:13:19 -0700
- To: wai-eo-editors@w3.org
EOWG-Editors: Here is my last set of comments related to the Training Suite. Jennifer [Draft] Web Accessibility Workshop Outline http://www.w3.org/WAI/training/workshop-outlines.html Version: Draft in progress, 3 May 2010 [ 1. a 3-day hands-on workshop I think it should be "three-day" throughout the document. I think words should be used when numbers are less than ten. If editor(s) agree, it might be a good idea to search for 3 throughout. And the same could go for 1 and 2. Maybe not "Day 1" "Day 2," or "Day 3," but I think when it's a compound adjective (three-day) it should be the word three. It really depends on how formal this document is intended to be. 2. Should it be "implementing?" Utilize WCAG 2.0 and its supporting documents as a guide to implement accessible websites 3. Session 5 - Workshop review and lessons learnt Should it be "learned?" I suppose it depends on how American-centric WAI wants to be. If it's changed, it appears at least one other time. 4. Maybe replace "relevant" with another word one of the times it's here: Discuss any relevant [JS: applicable?] [link] legislation or other policies relevant to the organization 5. Delete one of the "the"s: Discuss the the development of a web accessibility 6. [link] BAD reports I think if this link is read out of context, it could be misleading/confusing. Maybe "Reports from the Before and After Demo," or the like. My suggestion is long, though. 7. Should be "rewriting" re-writing material to make it more readable and understandable 8. Might want to modify link words to improve flow: Discuss ways of providing access to [link] access to data and longer descriptions Just del the words "access to" above the link? 9. Maybe change "around" to "related to" or "with respect to" Discuss the issues around 10. Know the accessibility requirements for multimedia media Is the second "media" needed? 11. Should it be "solutions," or is there only one? Discuss the issues and solution for [link] live audio 12. Should be "a" Discuss and selection of 13. Again, it depends on how American-centric WAI wants to be, but maybe this should be "gotten" Ensure participants have got the key messages from the workshop 14. In: Reiterate the value of using "How to Meet WCAG 2.0" as a gateway to WCAG 2.0 perhaps make: "How to Meet WCAG 2.0" into a link? 15. Get participants to "write down something you learned in the last 2 days that you will incorporate in your work right away, or something that surprised you, or the most interesting thing you learned" and then share it with the group Maybe change to: Ask participants to "write down something they learned in the last 2 days that they will incorporate in their work immediately, something that surprised them, or the most interesting thing they learned; then share it with the group My point is that I don't think "you" has been used elsewhere, so I found this switch a bit surprising. 16. May be a more positive way to frame "line of defense?" this is an initial workshop and a follow up may be appropriate for content authors as a quality assurance 'line of defence', working more with their content management system (CMS) or authoring tool on accessibility checking, and reinforcing their role in developing and publishing accessible content. 17. Would it be a good idea to write out the words for "SEO," or will this audience be familar? benefits for SEO , etc 18. It depends on how formal this document is intended to be, but I wonder about using the & in places like this: Finish days 1 & 2 with a brief 5 minute summary, and start days 2 & 3 with a brief summary of the previous day
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