Re: Accessible Presentations

Shawn:

All of the following are comments for editor's discretion.  Sorry if 
any repeat Andrew's comments sent earlier this week.

Note that I sometimes write the word "link" in brackets in hopes of 
clarifying where I mean.

Jennifer

Comments on:
  http://www.w3.org/WAI/training/accessible.php
[Draft for Review - updated Date: 2010/May/15]

1.  "This page helps you make your presentations, talks, meetings, 
and training accessible. . ."

JS:  Should be trainings since others in the list are plural.

2. to follow along an online version of your displayed material. For remote

JS:  add "via" or "with" an online version . . .

3. (More about
provide accessible material
  is above.)

JS: Should the word in the link be providing, instead of provide?

When that link is referenced, maybe it should be "providing" 
everywhere i.e. if you look at the "page contents," it might be good 
to make that verb parallel the others, including in its "h2," and 
then use "providing" consistently since that's what the heading would become.

See also, here, as another example, but there may be others:
See
[link] provide accessible material
  above. An

4. Give them material in advance and be available to answer any questions.

JS:  Add comma before the and.

5. be careful not to face turn away from the audience to read 
projected material.

JS: Perhaps delete "face."

6.  This is well said!:

Cover all displayed text.
Say all of the information that is on each slide. (This does not mean 
that you have
to read the slide exactly as it is, it just means that you cover the 
visual information
in what you say.)

7. Some times

JS: Should be "Sometimes."

Received on Thursday, 20 May 2010 18:00:03 UTC