minor comments on Business Case document

Hi Andrew,

First of all, thank you for addressing my previous comments. I think 
these changes are great.

Please find below some additional minor comments on the Business Case 
for your consideration:

## Overview
- validation error (simple ID name mismatch)
- s/The Web is increasingly an essential resource many aspects of 
life/The Web is increasingly an essential resource in many aspects of 
life (typo - forgot "in")
- consider a different word for "recoup" (not very common word)
- s/so too do their business cases/so do their business cases

## Social Factors
- s/including older people with age-related impairments/including people 
with age-related functional limitations ("impairment" unnecessary here)
- s/To estimate how many people are affected by Web accessibility is 
difficult/It is difficult to estimate how many people are affected by 
Web accessibility (I personally think it is easier to read this way)
- s/Overlap with Design for Older Users/Overlap with Older Users Needs
- consider "vision/hearing/physical/cognitive decline" rather than the 
term "impairment" in the bullets of "Overlap with Design for Older 
Users" (reduce use of the term (label) "impairment" where possible)
- s/The accessibility provisions that make the Web accessible provide 
many benefits for people experiencing impairments due to the ageing 
process/The accessibility provisions that make the Web accessible 
provide many benefits for people experiencing impairments due to the 
ageing process, even though they may not be regarded as having a 
disability (we first say that "people with disabilities includes older 
people with functional decline", then we say that "accessibility also 
benefits people without disabilities including older people" -- trying 
to qualify it here, and make the relationships very clear)
- s/Older people with age-related visual deterioration benefit 
from/Older people with visual decline benefit from
- s/Older people with diminished fine motor control benefit from/Older 
people with reduced fine motor control benefit from
- s/Older people with hearing loss benefit from/Older people with 
hearing decline benefit from
- consider adding something about cognitive disabilities in sub-section 
"Access for Older People", even if you just deffer to the "Access for 
People with Low Literacy and People Not Fluent in the Language" which 
has the relevant Success Criteria and Checkpoint mappings

## Financial Factors
- validation error (simple ID name mismatch)
- s/Testing design ideas and early prototypes with users with 
disabilities and older users, and including assistive 
technologies/Testing design ideas and early prototypes with users with 
disabilities and older users, and with assistive technologies


Regards,
   Shadi

-- 
Shadi Abou-Zahra - http://www.w3.org/People/shadi/ |
   WAI International Program Office Activity Lead   |
  W3C Evaluation & Repair Tools Working Group Chair |

Received on Thursday, 28 May 2009 09:47:28 UTC