RE: Presenting the Case for Web Accessibility: Edits

Blossom,

Thank you for your review and comments on the business case. I will post
a revised version with your changes and other's changes soon. 

Replies to your comments are below surrounded by brackets []. Let me
know if you want to discuss any of them.

Regards,

~ Shawn


- [noted in changelog as issue to address] Legal & Policy Factors suite
link - should be "Legacy and Policy Factors"
- incorrect use of "&" here.

- [DONE] Use of semicolons after bulleted list items in Overview page: I
would delete them. They are non-standard, are unnecessary, add clutter
to the bullets, and do not improve the reading experience for screen
reader users (at least JAWS users. Two blind Wells Fargo employees
tested this with 3.x versions of JAWS). Also, semicolons are not used in
lists in the other suite pages.

- [noted in changelog as issue to address] Social Factors page:
"benefits more people" anchor link could be "benefiting more people" for
parallel construction with the rest of the anchor links.

- [DONE] Technical Factors page: Anchor link for "Be Prepared for
Advanced Web Technologies" is missing.



> -----Original Message-----
> From: wai-eo-editors-request@w3.org
> [mailto:wai-eo-editors-request@w3.org] On Behalf Of 
> michaeka@wellsfargo.com
> Sent: Thursday, March 25, 2004 7:09 PM
> To: wai-eo-editors@w3.org; shawn@w3.org
> Subject: Presenting the Case for Web Accessibility: Edits
> 
> 
> 
> Hi, Shawn -
> 
> First of all: an apology. I sent comments on Presenting the
> Case to the EO list that weren't what you asked us to focus 
> on. In the email glut and work overload I'm experiencing 
> right now, I neglected to review the previous emails and only 
> saw them when trying to find the email address for edits.
> 
> I was simply trying to review the overall document before the
> more specific pages to get a feel for the whole.
> 
> Here's a few editorial comments:
> 
> - Legal & Policy Factors suite link - should be "Legacy and
> Policy Factors"
> - incorrect use of "&" here.
> 
> - Use of semicolons after bulleted list items in Overview
> page: I would delete them. They are non-standard, are 
> unnecessary, add clutter to the bullets, and do not improve 
> the reading experience for screen reader users (at least JAWS 
> users. Two blind Wells Fargo employees tested this with 3.x 
> versions of JAWS). Also, semicolons are not used in lists in 
> the other suite pages.
> 
> - Social Factors page: "benefits more people" anchor link
> could be "benefiting more people" for parallel construction 
> with the rest of the anchor links.
> 
> - Technical Factors page: Anchor link for "Be Prepared for
> Advanced Web Technologies" is missing.
> 
> I'll try to review the other pages on the way home on the ferry.
> 
> Blossom
> _____________________________________
> Blossom Michaeloff
> Web Research and Design
> Wells Fargo
> 415.222.3045
> michaeka@wellsfargo.com
>

Received on Monday, 12 April 2004 21:36:58 UTC