- From: Ian B. Jacobs <ij@w3.org>
- Date: Mon, 07 Oct 2002 08:44:41 -0400
- To: wai-eo-editors@w3.org
- CC: ij@w3.org
Judy, As I have mentioned in the past, UAAG 1.0 refers to "How People with Disabilities Use the Web" [1] and I would like "PWD" to be available from the TR page by the time UAAG 1.0 advances to Recommendation. I thought I might help this along by reviewing the document. It reads very well, and I have only a few minor comments. Thank you, - Ian [1] http://www.w3.org/WAI/EO/Drafts/PWD-Use-Web/20010104 1) Introduction: "guidelines for accessibility of Web sites, browsers, and authoring tools". I suggest "browsers and multimedia players", unless you prefer "user agents" right away. Also, I'd consider adding references to XAG. 2) "Online student who is deaf" scenario Editorial: "the material in a[n] accessible format" 3) Speech disabilities "To use parts of the Web that rely on voice recognition" There may be parts of the Web that can only be accessed by voice, but these are surely few in number. This phrase surprised me, but I'm not sure that any change is required. 4) Attention deficit disorder Suggest changing "To use the Web, an individual with an attention deficit disorder may need to turn off animations on a site in order to be able to focus on the site's content." to "An individual with an attention deficit disorder may need to turn off animations in order to be able to focus on other Web content." 5) ATs and Adaptive strategies In the first paragraph, a sentence ends "plug-ins." and should end "and plug-ins." 6) Scenario references (section 5). The checkpoint text for UAAG 1.0 needs to be updated. The checkpoints are longer than they used to be. Perhaps the checkpoint title alone is sufficient: 4.3 Configure text colors. [4.3 and 4.4 combined into 4.3] 4.4 Slow multimedia. [4.5 is now 4.4] 7) The reference information for UAAG 1.0 needs to be updated, and XAG 1.0 added. -- Ian Jacobs (ij@w3.org) http://www.w3.org/People/Jacobs Tel: +1 718 260-9447
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