Re: FW: [SVG 1.2 comment] Mostly editorial

>Al, I've tried twice now to send this to the address you listed, but 
>I think JAWS is having trouble reading me that address (or I'm 
>having trouble hearing it). 

I believe I erred on the casual side in setting off the email address
within the text.

The posting address I suggested is

wai-xtech@w3.org

In the previous message there was a period, ending the sentence, run
on with the end of the email address. Sorry.

Al



>At any rate, here are some very small things.
>
>John
>
>
>
>
>"Good design is accessible design."
>John Slatin, Ph.D.
>Director, Accessibility Institute
>University of Texas at Austin
>FAC 248C
>1 University Station G9600
>Austin, TX 78712
>ph 512-495-4288, f 512-495-4524
>email jslatin@mail.utexas.edu
>web 
><http://www.utexas.edu/research/accessibility/>http://www.utexas.edu/research/accessibility/
>
>
>
>-----Original Message-----
>From: John M Slatin
>Sent: Monday, November 22, 2004 3:13 pm
>To: wai-xpech@w3.org
>Subject: [SVG 1.2 comment] Mostly editorial
>
>A few editorial nits:
>Page:
><http://www.w3.org/TR/2004/WD-SVG12-20041027/flow.html>http://www.w3.org/TR/2004/WD-SVG12-20041027/flow.html
>The following sentence does not make sense:
><blockquote>
>
>The flowRegion element contains a set of shapes and exclusion 
>regions in which the text content of a parent flowRoot element is 
>drawn into.
></blockquote>
>The problem is with the construction "... in which ... is drawn into."
>The following is difficult to understand:
>"... and offset from their parent's siblings both before and after."
>"parent's siblings" is a difficult relationship to grasp on first 
>reading; "both before and after" what?
>Section: 4.12 Text Flow
><q>
>1. The text is then processed in logical order to determine line 
>breaking opportunities between characters, according to
></q>
>The word "then" is confusing in this sentence. It implies a step 0, 
>which hasn't been described. Since this is admittedly a high-level 
>description it's
>possible that step 0 is implicit, but it might be btter either to 
>spell it out or to delete the word "then" (easy way out)
>Section 4.15
>Examples
>Links to two examples have the same link text, so people using 
>screen readers can't tell which example they're going to.  This may 
>seem trivial since there
>is no current screen reader support for SVG, but would be meaningful 
>for people who keep hoping their screen readers will magically 
>support SVG (like yours
>truly).
>Multiple pages 
><http://www.w3.org/TR/2004/WD-SVG12-20041027/multipage.html>http://www.w3.org/TR/2004/WD-SVG12-20041027/multipage.html
>"... a page in SVG is defining an ordered list of groups containing" 
>Change: "is defining" to "defines"?
>"Hyperlinking to a page will seek the document to the begin time of 
>that page." This use of  the verb "seek" is confusing; it is not 
>standard English.
>Text Enhancements
><http://www.w3.org/TR/2004/WD-SVG12-20041027/text.html>http://www.w3.org/TR/2004/WD-SVG12-20041027/text.html
>Allowing editable text has implications for accessibility- esp. if 
>the user agent is supposed to support WYSIWYG editing; the UA's edit 
>function will also
>have to support screen readers, in addition to the keyboard 
>functionalities described.
>
>
>
>"Good design is accessible design."
>John Slatin, Ph.D.
>Director, Accessibility Institute
>University of Texas at Austin
>FAC 248C
>1 University Station G9600
>Austin, TX 78712
>ph 512-495-4288, f 512-495-4524
>email jslatin@mail.utexas.edu
>web 
><http://www.utexas.edu/research/accessibility/>http://www.utexas.edu/research/accessibility/

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