The E-Gov Document needs a professional technical writer on the group.

Hi All,

The document is not readable 
for someone that is not a 
policy professional, and then 
it's awkward. A person who is 
aging, a person with a 
cognitive disability or even 
one with ADD could not read 
this. Most of the prose don't 
need to use complex language, 
but they do.

Since this is an important 
idea with some critical 
proposals, it needs to be 
writing to as broad of an 
audience as the topic allows. 
  That is why a professional 
technical writer would be so 
good.  They get can complex 
technology issues and their 
social implications clear and 
accessible.

Wayne