Re: Instructions for the About WCAG 2.0 Presentation

Hi Alan & EOWG,

Thanks for reviewing and commenting on this document. We had "frozen" it in order to get it completed and announced; however, I went a head and made some of the changes you suggest. If you feel strong about any of the changes that I didn't make, please let me know.

If anyone has concerns with the changes noted below, please let me know right away.

> The title might be easier to understand if "About WCAG 2.0" was put in 
> quotes:
> Instructions for the "About WCAG 2.0" Presentation

Done.

> The "available in 2 formats" part is less important than the heading 
> that comes after it. It could go further down, just before the "A video 
> presentation..." paragraph.

We had it there is a previous version; however, Judy noted that it was hard for her to find the links to the actual presentation when it was down there. The first time people come to this page, it would be good for them to read the other material first and have the links to the presentation lower down. However, once people have read the intro paragraph, they don't need to again. For repeat users, it would be much better to have the links to the actual presentation right up front.

I think we want to err on the side of making it easy to find the links to the actual presentation, and leave them up top. OK?

Also, I added "(updated 30 October 2007)" and it seems it would be good to have that date up top.

> Under "Advice for Presenters" / "Customize the presentation for audience 
> and time"
> "Cut out" in "you will probably need to cut out slides" is perhaps 
> difficult to understand for non-native speakers, implying use of 
> scissors. "Delete" is more accurate.

Done.

> Under "Advice for Presenters" / "Cover all displayed text..." this is 
> perhaps confusing. "Talk about" is a less elegant phrase but easier to 
> understand.

Hum. We want to *discourage* people from just reading the text on each slide verbatim (word-for-word), and also talking *too* much about what's on each slide. We worked on the wording of the paragraph to try to get it to communicate that clearly. Therefore, I wonder if it's OK to leave the heading as is.

> Under "Advice for Presenters" / "Provide handouts"
> On first reading I thought this referred to printing out the 
> presentation. It should perhaps be something like "Provide other WAI 
> handouts" to avoid ambiguity.

I think ideally they would do both. I changed the paragraph to: "Consider providing copies of the presentation materials for the audience. For additional handouts related to this presentation, see WAI Handouts and WAI Flyer."
OK?

> Under "Permission and Reference" / Images, the sentence "Image credits 
> and information on permission to use are included in the Notes section 
> where the image first appears." was very difficult to understand for me. 
> Perhaps it could be clearer like this "Some images in the presentation 
> are used with permission. Credits and information on permission to use 
> them are included in the Notes section of the slide where the image 
> first appears".

Changed to: "Credits for the images and information on permission to use the images are included in the Notes section where the image first appears."

> This section should perhaps say why this is important. When people use 
> the presentation themselves, do they need to obtain permission 
> separately for the images?

This is different for each image, and thus addressed in the Notes section for each image.

> best regards,

~Shawn

>> Agenda:
>>
>> 1. WCAG 2.0 presentation: Title & HTML version
>> * Instructions for the WCAG 2.0 Presentation 
>> http://www.w3.org/WAI/presentations/WCAG20_about/
>> * Links to the presentation will be added before the teleconference.
>>
>> Note that the HTML version is provided for people who want to preview 
>> the material online without having to download the presentation format 
>> and for people who use HTML tools for presentations (usually advanced 
>> users). The HTML version is *not* designed for novices to use for 
>> actual presentations. We may decide to provide that later.
>>
>> Questions:
>> - Any concerns with the HTML or CSS formatting or design?
>> - Because we might provide different types of WCAG 2.0 presentations, 
>> what do you think about changing the title to:
>>  *About WCAG 2.0*
>>  Web Content Accessibility Guidelines
>

Received on Tuesday, 30 October 2007 15:03:19 UTC