EOWG, When commenting on documents, it is helpful if you include the following for each of your comments: * priority[1] * location * text you are commenting on * suggested revision * rationale For example: 1. simple wording change * priority: [suggested] * location: business case overview, "Developing a Customized Business Case" section (http://www.w3.org/WAI/EO/Drafts/bcase/Overview.html#custom), first paragraph, first sentence * current wording: "An effective business case focuses on the organization's objectives and motivations." * suggested revision: ...on the organization's cats and dogs. * rationale: the phrase "objectives and motivations" could be difficult for non-native-English speakers to understand, and difficult to translate. "cats and dogs" gets across the same point and is more clear & simple wording. 2. next point summary... [1] This will vary according to the stage of the document. For documents that are in final review and approval stages, it is helpful to use [required this version] or [suggested] to indicate if it is an issue that you feel must be addressed before this version is posted, or if it is a suggestion for "editor's discretion" and can be held for consideration for the next version. Regards, ~ ShawnReceived on Tuesday, 9 August 2005 22:32:28 UTC
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