RE: [Online Overview] What is Web Accessibility? slide

Hello, all -

Yes, this is wordsmithing; but given that my changes below change emphasis
somewhat, I'm posting here.

Would suggest:

1. Placing the "thats" at the end of the first-level bullet phrases rather
than having "that" begin each second-level bullet phrase. (Less redundant,
begins each second-level bullet phrase with a stronger word, and makes each
phrase stand out more clearly.)

2. Capitalizing the first word of each second-level bullet. (Stronger
beginning than lower-case first letter.)

3. Deleting the semi-colons and the "ands" ending second-level bullet
phrases. (Bullets already separate the content, so they aren't necessary.
Also, the text looks cleaner without them, and each phrase stands out a bit
more clearly.)

4. No comma after "Web authoring tools"

___________________________________

NEW VERSION:
What is Web Accessibility?

Web accessibility means access to the Web by everyone, regardless of 
disability.

Web accessibility includes:
- Web sites and applications that
         -- People with disabilities can perceive, understand, 
navigate, and interact with
- Web browsers and media players that
         -- Can be used effectively by people with disabilities
         -- Work well with assistive technologies that some people
with disabilities use to access the Web
- Web authoring tools and evolving Web technologies that
         -- Support production of accessible Web content and Web 
sites
         -- Are usable by people with disabilities

___________________________________

OLD VERSION:
What is Web Accessibility?

Web accessibility means access to the Web by everyone, regardless of 
disability.

Web accessibility includes:
- Web sites and applications
         -- that people with disabilities can perceive, understand, 
navigate, and interact with;
- Web browsers and media players
         -- that can be used effectively by people with disabilities, and
         -- that work well with assistive technologies that some people 
with disabilities use to access the Web;
- Web authoring tools, and evolving Web technologies
         -- that support production of accessible Web content and Web 
sites, and
         -- that are usable by people with disabilities.

Received on Thursday, 10 April 2003 20:07:47 UTC