- From: Joseph Reagle <reagle@w3.org>
- Date: Wed, 3 Jul 2002 15:13:03 -0400
- To: Susan Lesch <lesch@w3.org>
- Cc: "XML Signature (W3C/IETF)" <w3c-ietf-xmldsig@w3.org>, janet@w3.org
Susan, thank you for the comments, the resulting document is [1]. For the
Working Group: the draft status has also been updated to reflect that the
document has been approved for publication as a Recommendation, which
should happen later in July. We're not anticipating a lot of press
activity, but if folks (particularly implementors) are interested (e.g.,
testimonials or referrals if there are press calls) please contact Janet
Daly.
[1] http://www.w3.org/Signature/Drafts/xml-exc-c14n
$Revision: 1.79 $ on $Date: 2002/07/03 19:02:54 $ GMT by $Author: reagle $
These are minor editorial comments for your Exclusive XML
Canonicalization Proposed Recommendation [1]. Apologies, these were due
about 10 days ago. If they are too late to be useful please ignore.
Thanks!
s/Proposed Recommendations/Proposed Recommendation/
s/W3C membership/W3C Membership/
s/The Names in XML Recommendation/The Namespaces in XML Recommendation/
(or The namespaces Recommendation)
Fixed.
There are six occurrences of "node set" and four of
"nodeset". I am not
sure but think that would be "node-set" with a hyphen. (The
XPath
Recommendation has one "Node Set" in a heading, the rest
"node-set".)
Fixed.
In 1.1, I guess you have nodes marked up as code and elements as em.
If that's right, I would say element <em>E</em> in paragraph
8. That
paragraph also needs an ending period after "prefix."
Fixed.
There are two occurrences of "xml namespace" and one "XML
namespace".
If you need lowercase, can the xml be code, or could all three be
"XML
namespace"?
Fixed.
XPath node-set, that is an octet sequence,
maybe could be either:
XPath node-set that is an octet sequence
or:
XPath node-set, that is, an octet sequence,
(not sure there)
"as an octet sequence"
In 1.3 item 2, visibly utilized could be <a
class="link-def"
href="#def-visibly-utilizes">visibly utilized</a>
Ok.
s/the following XPath expression/the following XPath expression:/
s/presense/presence/
Ok.
s/thestate/the state/
(don't see that)
s/whitespace delimited list/white space delimited list/
or change the other:
s/a white space separated list/a whitespace separated list/
"what space"
s/in in/in/
Ok.
First person could be hard to translate.
(see http://www.w3.org/2001/06/manual/#Translations)
While we feel such choices are consistent with other XML
specifications and satisfy our application requirements it is
important that....
could be:
While such choices are consistent with other XML specifications
and satisfy [?] application requirements it is important that....
Interesting, "While such choices are consistent with other XML
specifications and satisfy the Working Group's application requirements..."
We provide this example to caution
could be:
This example is provided to caution
In 6. Keywords, "S. Bradner. March 1997." appears twice.
Fixed.
In 6. URI, there is an extra space in "RFC 2396 ."
I don't see it.
In 6. XPath, "eds." could be omitted and the names could be J.
Clark and S. DeRose to match your other references.
Ok.
Received on Wednesday, 3 July 2002 15:13:27 UTC