- From: Joseph Reagle <reagle@w3.org>
- Date: Wed, 3 Jul 2002 15:13:03 -0400
- To: Susan Lesch <lesch@w3.org>
- Cc: "XML Signature (W3C/IETF)" <w3c-ietf-xmldsig@w3.org>, janet@w3.org
Susan, thank you for the comments, the resulting document is [1]. For the Working Group: the draft status has also been updated to reflect that the document has been approved for publication as a Recommendation, which should happen later in July. We're not anticipating a lot of press activity, but if folks (particularly implementors) are interested (e.g., testimonials or referrals if there are press calls) please contact Janet Daly. [1] http://www.w3.org/Signature/Drafts/xml-exc-c14n $Revision: 1.79 $ on $Date: 2002/07/03 19:02:54 $ GMT by $Author: reagle $ These are minor editorial comments for your Exclusive XML Canonicalization Proposed Recommendation [1]. Apologies, these were due about 10 days ago. If they are too late to be useful please ignore. Thanks! s/Proposed Recommendations/Proposed Recommendation/ s/W3C membership/W3C Membership/ s/The Names in XML Recommendation/The Namespaces in XML Recommendation/ (or The namespaces Recommendation) Fixed. There are six occurrences of "node set" and four of "nodeset". I am not sure but think that would be "node-set" with a hyphen. (The XPath Recommendation has one "Node Set" in a heading, the rest "node-set".) Fixed. In 1.1, I guess you have nodes marked up as code and elements as em. If that's right, I would say element <em>E</em> in paragraph 8. That paragraph also needs an ending period after "prefix." Fixed. There are two occurrences of "xml namespace" and one "XML namespace". If you need lowercase, can the xml be code, or could all three be "XML namespace"? Fixed. XPath node-set, that is an octet sequence, maybe could be either: XPath node-set that is an octet sequence or: XPath node-set, that is, an octet sequence, (not sure there) "as an octet sequence" In 1.3 item 2, visibly utilized could be <a class="link-def" href="#def-visibly-utilizes">visibly utilized</a> Ok. s/the following XPath expression/the following XPath expression:/ s/presense/presence/ Ok. s/thestate/the state/ (don't see that) s/whitespace delimited list/white space delimited list/ or change the other: s/a white space separated list/a whitespace separated list/ "what space" s/in in/in/ Ok. First person could be hard to translate. (see http://www.w3.org/2001/06/manual/#Translations) While we feel such choices are consistent with other XML specifications and satisfy our application requirements it is important that.... could be: While such choices are consistent with other XML specifications and satisfy [?] application requirements it is important that.... Interesting, "While such choices are consistent with other XML specifications and satisfy the Working Group's application requirements..." We provide this example to caution could be: This example is provided to caution In 6. Keywords, "S. Bradner. March 1997." appears twice. Fixed. In 6. URI, there is an extra space in "RFC 2396 ." I don't see it. In 6. XPath, "eds." could be omitted and the names could be J. Clark and S. DeRose to match your other references. Ok.
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