Re: Draft Framework Report

Hello Renato,

I've reviewed the report and am looking forward to our call tomorrow. It's 
really great to read this. 

I didn't see this version of the report on the wiki so didn't enter the 
miscellaneous typo fixes and grammatical corrections I found. I'm happy to 
enter those if I can get access to the current draft. Here are my more 
substantive questions and comments. I am happy to make any and all of the 
changes I have outlined here if the group agrees with these changes. I'm 
sorry if I missed where to input changes directly.

My comments:

Does the definition of an emergency need to be included up front? I 
noticed in 3.3.2 WHAT, the paragraph before the last set of bullets, this 
phrase - "or lack of education facilities". If this qualifies as an 
emergency in the context of this document, I think it would be helpful to 
define that. I'm not sure that that particular example (lack of education) 
fits the Phased Framework Model and the w3 Use Case Model as an emergency 
example, so I'd appreciate more clarity on the definition from this group.
In figure 1, in Jurisdiction, is an item for 'Cultural Boundaries' needed? 
 I'm wondering about tribal structures or other less formal models of 
government that might influence jurisdiction.
In 2.2, Phased Framework Model, bullet 2 Preparedness - IMO this topic 
could also relate to anticipated but not actual emergencies -- for 
instance, a region that experiences frequent typhoons may wish to engage 
in preparedness in a general sense, for instance deploying communications 
and power-generation devices to strategic locations, without this activity 
being for an actual event. This seems to be Preparedness (not Mitigation) 
but is not covered in the definition given the word 'actual.'
same area, bullet 4 Recovery - suggest changing the phrase 'including a 
review of the effectiveness of the [pre-planning] phases....' - change 
'pre-planning' to 'mitigation and preparedness'.
In figure 2, the Mitigation section seems sparse. For Organizations, would 
it be appropriate to add 'Education' and 'Strategic Planning'? For 
Activities, how about 'Define Scope of Action" - maybe a better phrase 
needed, but to me this means predicting the scope of operations for 
defined activities to be better able to act when the Preparedness or 
Response phases kick in.
Should 'Returned Evacuees' be 'Returned or Resettled Evacuees'?
Sections 3.3.1 and 3.3.2 and 3.3.3 are misnumbered - should be 3.1.1 and 
3.1.2. and 3.1.3 respectively.
In Figure 3:
I saw somewhere a mention of teams. A team could be made up of 
unaffiliatedPersons or contactPersons or maybe is part of Organization? Is 
it necessary to have a branch off any of these to capture 'team'? 
In Emergency - what about individual incidents within an emergency? Say a 
dam breach as a result of a flood, and a resulting cholera epidemic -- 
seems those two might qualify as 'sub-emergencies'. Is that accounted for 
in the model, or does it need to be? 
In Resources - what about Supplies, and Expertise, both of which could be 
resources but don't seem accounted for. I consider supplies to be 
different from equipment.
Can a resource be 'allocated' or 'unallocated' for deployment? 
Is 'need' considered a 'capability'? In the 2nd paragraph under 3.3.1 WHO, 
it says 'An affectedPerson may need emergency services....' Yet just 
before that it says 'Person...provides a set of capabilities...' The 
implication in the diagram is that need = capability, but maybe should be 
clarified? This also affects 1st paragraph under 3.3.2 WHAT - 
'Capabilities represent the type of activities' - should we add 'or need'?
3rd paragraph under 3.3.1. WHO says that contactDetails may represent 
contact information for any person INVOLVED in an emergency -- but what 
about 'AFFECTED by' an emergency? Unless we mean that 'involved in' can 
also mean 'affected by' - it wasn't clear to me that both were implied.
Can we explain the connection between the Phased Framework Model and the 
W3 Use Case Model? For instance, is the 4-phased approach represented in 
the use case model, and how?  Also for instance, in the Use Case Model, 
what is an affectedPerson BEFORE an emergency? just a Person? That doesn't 
seem specific enough. If the Use Case Model will apply to a Mitigation or 
Preparation phase, then would there be a 'Population' that must be 
understood? Some commentary on the gaps and overlaps between these models 
might be good.
In 4. Toward Common Ontologies - I liked paragraph 1 and felt it was a 
good introduction to the entire document, setting the stage for the 
report. 
Para 2 - 'Clearly we have shown.....'   - have we? I'm not sure we've made 
that case. I think we're coming into this effort believing that, but I'm 
not sure the case is made in the report. What conclusions are we drawing 
from the two frameworks and the two use cases, and the intersection and 
challenges, that let's us make this claim?

I hope these comments make sense and are useful. Thank you for your 
leadership, Renato.

Best regards,
 

Rebecca E. Curzon
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Renato Iannella <renato@nicta.com.au> 
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Dear all, the first (editors) Draft of the "Emergency Information 
Interoperability Framework" report is now available [1].
(Note: this will become an HTML file soon - but now is PDF due to some 
uploading issues with the W3C site..)

This report is far from complete and needs a lot of additional content.

This is now the opportunity to do so!

We expect to go thru the draft report at the next teleconference [2] 
in detail and identify the outstanding sections that need more work, 
but also feel free to now email any suggestions and feedback to the 
list.


Cheers...  Renato Iannella
NICTA

[1] <
http://www.w3.org/2005/Incubator/eiif/wiki/images/7/77/XGR-framework-20081106.pdf 

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[2] <http://www.w3.org/2005/Incubator/eiif/wiki/2008-11-20>