CHANGE: Drop mention of "WEBRTC effort" in Abstract, add ref to RTCWEB group (was: Re: Update 20111017 to Editor draft)

Hi Adam, everyone,

On 10/17/2011 06:42 PM, Adam Bergkvist wrote:
> The editor team put up a new version of the editor draft at

Thanks. Note a minor typo: in the header section, there is a missing "</a>" at the end of the link to the previous version that makes the link span over the list of editors.

> Changes:
> * Added abstract.

The term "WEBRTC effort" is undefined. I take it to mean the combination of WebRTC and RTCWEB groups, but this is not self-evident. Harald defines the "RTCWEB/WEBRTC effort" in section 2.2 of the Overview draft:
... but the abstract should read without requiring external reading.

I propose two editorial changes to clarify:

1. I think the abstract is more to describe the specification than the underlying effort in any case, so I propose to drop the first sentence, and reformulate a bit the second sentence as:
"This document defines a set of APIs that allow local media, including audio and video, to be requested from a platform, media to be sent over the network to another browser or device implementing the appropriate set of real-time protocols, and media received from another browser or device to be processed and displayed locally."

2. I would then make an explicit reference to the IETF RTCWEB group at the end of the "Introduction" section with something like:
"This specification is being developed in conjunction with a protocol specification developed by the IETF RTCWEB group [RTCWEB]."

I think the abstract should be updated before publication as first public working draft because that's the first (and sometimes only!) thing people will see.


Received on Tuesday, 18 October 2011 12:40:58 UTC