Re: Request for Review of WebID specs before publishing

https://dvcs.w3.org/hg/WebID/raw-file/tip/spec/identity-respec.html

4) Overview

a) The TimBL uri under the image in the beginning of line text should be 
hyperlinked:

"The WebID URI - "http://www.w3.org/People/Berners-Lee/card#i"

b) "is an Identifier that denotes" should be "is an identifier that 
denotes" and " Or it can related the WebID to Principals" should be " Or 
it can related the WebID to principals" unless we are capitalizing these 
terms for a reason.
c) "who acts in the world, ... " sounds weird and the comma should be 
taken out.  Perhaps "who directs the World Web Consortium..."
d) Given the minute size of the #i hash tag, in

"The WebID URI - /"http://www.w3.org/People/Berners-Lee/card*#i*"/ - is 
an Identifier that denotes (refers to) a person or more generally an 
agent: in the illustration the referent is Tim Berners Lee, the real 
physical person who has a history, who invented the World Wide Web, who 
acts in the world, ... The WebID Profile URI - 
/"http://www.w3.org/People/Berners-Lee/card"/ - denotes..."

I would consider explicitly saying something like:

"The WebID URI - /"http://www.w3.org/People/Berners-Lee/card*#i*"/ - 
(with #i hash tag)  is an Identifier that denotes (refers to) a person 
or more generally an agent: in the illustration the referent is Tim 
Berners Lee, the real physical person who has a history, who invented 
the World Wide Web, who acts in the world, ... The WebID Profile URI - 
/"http://www.w3.org/People/Berners-Lee/card"/ - (no #i hash tag) denotes"

to draw attention to the differences.

         - Erich

On 09/05/13 9:52 AM, Henry Story wrote:
> Dear WebID Community Group,
>
>    we now have three specs up on github here
>
>     https://dvcs.w3.org/hg/WebID/raw-file/tip/spec/index.html
>
> All editors think that it is time to publish a new version
> on the W3C WebID Incubator space, to finalise the distinction
> between WebID, WebID-TLS, and the cert ontology.
>
> So we would like to be able to publish the specs above
> at the following location, by Friday 20 September 2013
>
>    http://www.w3.org/2005/Incubator/webid/spec/
>
> We would be very happy to receive feedback from
> the community before doing so. If you can spot
> any errors or improvements please let us know,
> we'll do our best to get them in before publication.
>
>     Thanks,
>
> 		Henry Story
>
>
> Social Web Architect
> http://bblfish.net/
>
>