- From: Christoph Päper <christoph.paeper@crissov.de>
- Date: Wed, 19 Dec 2007 02:18:06 +0100
- To: public-sweo-ig@w3.org
Some minor editorial comments. 2. URIs for Web Documents - One of the dots in "Alice and bob both work at Example Inc.." should go. - Choose either [AWWW] or [WWW-Arch] [Web architecture], don't mix them. 4.1. Hash URIs - "Again, the 303 See Other status code must be used." Only 302 has been used so far. The transition between 4.1 and 4.2 is not really straight forward. 4.2. 303 URIs - "“303 See Other”" Remove quotation marks here, but decide whether to use typographic or typewriter style in general (also for apostrophes). 4.3. Choosing between 303 and Hash "http://www.example.com/about# product456" Excess space after hash sign (also Alice and Bob used to be the examples). 4.5. Linking "|<link />| element", "|<link>| element" (in diagram) -> "|link| element" 5. Examples from the Web "several 100k" does not seem like recommendable English. <http://ontoworld.org/wiki/Special:ExportRDF/Karlsruhe> seems to work, too. 6.1. New URI Schemes "resourcse" -> "resources" 6.2. Reference by Description "A person, for example, could be described with her name, date of birth, and social security number." 'his', SSN is US-specific. 8. Acknowledgements "Stuart Williams (HP Labs) and Norman Walsh from TAG" -> Stuart Williams from HP Labs and Norman Walsh from TAG" or "Stuart Williams (HP Labs) and Norman Walsh (TAG)" "AAstrand" -> "Åstrand", probably. "bmb+f" -> "BMBF" (Bundesministerium für Bildung und Forschung) Perhaps you could drop the protocol and domain part more often in prose. Both "email" and "e-mail" are used in the document and prbably more small inconsistences. |@@|-Notes are stylistically deemphasised, when they should be emphasised (like they are in some other W3C drafts).
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