- From: Leora Morgenstern <leora@cs.nyu.edu>
- Date: Tue, 28 Sep 2010 09:18:38 -0400
- To: "Stella Mitchell" <stellamit@gmail.com>
- Cc: "RIF" <public-rif-wg@w3.org>
Stella, I'm doing the edits you suggested, one by one (as well as finding other stuff in the process.) Regarding Section 3.2., 3rd paragraph, I realize that I too don't know what "such information" means. (I think Chris wrote this section.) Did you figure it out? Thanks, Leora On Sat, September 25, 2010 11:51 am, Stella Mitchell wrote: > Dear WG, > > I found the Primer quite readable, clear and useful, and just have some > minor comments. > > Stella > > > Section 2.2.2, 2nd para: > the last sentence reads to me as if the constant is called a > predicate in both the last 2 of the 3 types of constants mentioned, but > not > sure if that's what's meant. > > Section 3.2, 3rd para: > us --> use > > also, I had to read that sentence a few times because I was > thinking > that "such information" referred to the lowercase letters and uppercase > letters. > > Section 4: > 1st example: > the iris for imdb and dbpedia should match up with those in > the > section 2.3 rule that this example is combined with (and the prefixes > might > as well too). > > missing space after the "char" prefix > > Section 5: > In the second paragraph maybe add another sentence characterizing > what a function is/does? There's a specific example in the first > paragraph, > but it's a very brief introduction to functions. > > Section 5.2.2, Example: > does Film1 necessarily have to be different from Film2? > > near the top, there's an extra space between dbpedia: and > dateoffilm > > Section 6.1 > 2nd paragraph: > might as well say "C++ or Java" rather than "C++", like it does > in > Section 6.2. > > Example: > imdb and dbpedia prefixes and iris could be made consistent with > earlier examples. > (same comment for the example in 7.1.1) > > Section 6.2 > first example: System.println --> System.out.println > > second example: if it can be written with the less advanced syntax > ex:e1 # Example > ex:e1[...] > ex:e1[...] > it may be easier to understand the RIF, and the parallel > structure with the Java would be even more obvious. > > Section 7 > there are some "add pointer" notes/comments > > General: > some of the examples are extending outside the blue-colored box and > require scrolling to the right. > > Appendix: > at the very end just before the last reference, there's a span > element > displayed. > -- Leora Morgenstern, Ph.D. http://www-formal.stanford.edu/leora
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