- From: Andy Seaborne <andy.seaborne@epimorphics.com>
- Date: Tue, 06 Dec 2011 12:20:59 +0000
- To: public-rdf-dawg@w3.org
Birte, Thank you for the review. Steve - I've left non-editorial points on your sections as marked @@ below. I have done some editorial changes to them which you might wish to check; hope that's OK. Andy On 03/12/11 18:54, Birte Glimm wrote: > Andy, Steve, all, > > since I agreed to review the SPARQL Query sec, here is the first part > of my review, which covers Sec 1-17, i.e., up to the algebra section. > > Best regards, > > Birte > > 1.1, Description of Sec. 19: I suggest to link SPARQL update > to the update specification Done > > 2.5, 2nd example query: Do I not have to use a fullstop to end the > triple pattern? I could be wrong here. > ?P foaf:givenName ?G ; > foaf:surname ?S ***.*** > BIND(CONCAT(?G, " ", ?S) AS ?name) It's not required. The DOT is not needed when not followed by more triples (if you'll forgive the double negative). Ditto ?s :p ?o OPTIONAL { ?s :q ?v } > 4.1.1.2 There is an extra space before the fullstop in "Relative IRIs > are combined with [...] basic algorithm in Section 5.2*** ***. Section > 5.2 should be section 5.2 to be consistent with the rest of the > document. Done (2) > 8.1 Filtering of query solutions [...] using NOT EXIST***S*** Done > > 8.1.1 [...] given the values of variables in-scope > I think at this point the term in-scope has not yet been > introduced. Can we at least link that to 18.2.1 Variable Scope > (#variableScope) reworded as: """ given the values of variables in the group graph pattern in which the filter occurs. """ and filters are, more generally, applicable to group graph patterns. > 8.3.3 I suggest to use in both examples ?x (curently the first query > uses ?a and the second ?x); the use of ?a somehow suggests a > relationship with :a in the data, which is not intended. Changed. It was also wrong because the variable x is used in the answers > 9 [...] Property paths allow for more concise expression*s* of some > SPARQL basic graph patterns [...] Variables can not be used, no space > in can not Correct as is but this is not working for you so changed to: "more concise expressions for some" "cannot" vs "can not" -- both are correct. Separate words used here to leave a slight stress to the "not". > 9.1 (table) > "A sequence path of elt1, followed by elt2" is the only entry that > does not end with a fullstop Done, and comma removed. > A alternative path of elt1, or elt2<- A**n** alternative..., I would > remove the comma Done > A path of zero or one elt.<- A path of zero or one occurrences of > elt. (to be consistent with the rest) Done. > 9.2 "Example: Arbitrary length path match: Some forms of limited > inference are possible as well. For example: all > types and supertypes of a resource:" > This only applies to RDF(S) entailment. With OWL entailment not only > subClassOf statements can lead to subsumptions or types. Maybe this should be > clarified, e.g., by saying "Some forms of limited (RDF and RDFS) > inference are possible as well." Changed to: "For example, for RDFS, all types and supertypes of a resource" > 9.3 "Any variables introduced in the equivalent pattern are not part of > the results - they are hidden by implicit projection of the results to > just the variables given in the query." This should probably mention > that variables are also fresh, i.e., newly introduced variables do not > occur anywhere else in the query. Done. """ Any variables introduced in the equivalent pattern are not part of the results and are not already used elsewhere. "" also, I made the introduced variable start ?_ to make them look a bit machine-y. (of course, could introduce bnodes and the project happens for free :-) > > "whereas if the query were written out" is it not "was written out" > since query is singular? Use of the the past subjunctive in a conditional. The more informal "was" is taking over in written text. The present subjunctive is archaic "if the query be written out" I have noticed 9.3 says that :p* is equivalent to :p{0} union :p+. Translation text removed - the example is not affected otherwise (it is equivalent in this case - just not in general and not expressed like that in the formal algebra). > 10 "[...] The new variable must not already be in-scope in the query > at that point it is used." at *the* point Done """ The new variable must not already be in-scope in the query at the point where it is used. """ > 10.1 I would find it very helpful, if the sentence "Use of BIND is a > separate element of a group graph pattern and it ends any basic graph > pattern." is picked up in the example. Does this mean that the BGP > ?x ns:price ?p . > ?x ns:discount ?discount > BIND (?p*(1-?discount) AS ?price) > FILTER(?price< 20) > ?x dc:title ?title . > of the example is equivalent to > { ?x ns:price ?p . > ?x ns:discount ?discount > BIND (?p*(1-?discount) AS ?price) > } > { FILTER(?price< 20) > ?x dc:title ?title . > } > This doesn't seem to make sense. Can the example be shown also with > brackets to illustrate what "ends any BGP" means? Good idea. It's not > { FILTER(?price< 20) > ?x dc:title ?title . > } the FILTER applies to the whole group. I've added an equivalent query example: """ Equivalent query (BIND ends the basic graph pattern: the FILTER applies to the whole group graph pattern): PREFIX dc: <http://purl.org/dc/elements/1.1/> PREFIX ns: <http://example.org/ns#> SELECT ?title ?price { { ?x ns:price ?p . ?x ns:discount ?discount BIND (?p*(1-?discount) AS ?price) } {?x dc:title ?title . } FILTER(?price < 20) } """ > 11.1 The results table uses ?totalPrice in the header, but there shouldn't > be a question mark, just totalPrice as ? is just variable syntax, but > the variable is totalPrice. Done. > It might also make sense to just use org > in the following text instead of ?org and there is also one > ?totalPrice in the last sentence of the section. Typewriter font > should be used for the variables or query syntax elements as elsewhere > in the document. I have done the editorial side of these comments. I reformatted this area - I kept ?org but it's monospaced, and monospaced all SPARQL syntax in text. @@Steve - please check your happy with the changes. > "[...] In aggregate queries and sub-queries variables that appear > in the query pattern, but are not in the GROUP BY clause cannot be > projected nor used in project expressions." I would add a comma after > "GROUP BY clause" Done > I don't think this is correct. I can select expressions with aggrated > variables that are not grouped: > SELECT (SAMPLE(?x) AS ?y) { ?x :p ?z } GROUP BY ?z @@Steve > Isn't (SAMPLE(?x) AS ?y) what you call a project expression? Shouldn't > project expression anyway be select expression? @@Steve > "It is an error for aggregates to project variables with a name > already used in other aggregate projections." > Isn't it even forbidden to use any variable that is used elsewhere? > SELECT (SAMPLE(?x) AS ?y) { ?x :p ?y } GROUP BY ?y > would not be valid, right? @@Steve > 11.2 "Note that the empty set is used in some aggregates to pass > scalar arguments to the set function. Sclar arguments are used to pass > argument to the set function which apply to all values passed. " > One sentence is redundant. Probably the second as it also has a > grammar error "which pll*ies*" > "And example is..."<- "An example is..." @@Steve > 16.2.2 "where app:customDate identified an extension function", I > would use "identifies" here Done > 16.2.4 The document pretty consistently sets SPARQL grammar keywords > in typewriter font, but not so in this section. CONSTRUCT and FILTER > are normal font, but WHERE is typewriter First CONSTRUCT is referring to the query form, not the syntax (e.g. in the section titles) so I've added "query form". I have corrected the others. > 17 "These errors have no affect outside of FILTER evaluation." > s/affect/effect/ Done > 17.4.1.4 "There is a filter operator EXISTS that takes a graph > pattern. exists returns true/false depending on whether the pattern > matches the dataset" > The second exists should also be uppercase. Done > True/false is usually written in typewriter font within the document. > Shouldn't dataset in "pattern matches the dataset" not rather be > something like active graph or queried graph? Changed to: "given the bindings in the current group graph pattern, the dataset and the active graph at this point in the query evaluation." > "The NOT EXISTS form translates into fn:not(EXISTS{...})." > Why is the next line then explicitly specifying the evaluation of NOT EXISTS > { pattern } to return xsd:boolean values? because NOT EXISTS is the important form so I wanted to emphasise it. > "Returns true if pattern matches the dataset." same as above > s/dataset/active graph/? remove " the dataset" (twice) given the longer text now preceding it. > The algebra function exists is mentioned here first. This is the only > function that is all lowercase. All others have an uppercase first > character. Furthermore, in the "titles" exists is also written with > first character uppercse, e.g., "Definition: Exists" (funnily under > 18.4.1.8 Sample) or "Definition: Evaluation of Exists" in 18.5. Capitalized. > > 17.4.2.8 "The IRI function constructs an IRI by resolving the string > argument (see RFC 3986 or any later RFC that superceeds RFC 3986. ). " > remove the fullstop and space in the brackets. Done. And put back ref to RFC 3987 as, on checking, I see that RFC 3987 allows real, concrete IRIs, not just mapped to URIs. > ----------------- > > also noticed, although Sec. 18 not yet reviewed: > 18.2.1 "v is in-scope if in-scope in"<- "v is in-scope if **it is** > in-scope in" > although Sec 18+ not yet reviewed. > Done
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