FPWD--Not convinced yet

Colleagues:

It pains me to write this, because I know how eager we are to get on to
publication and the steps beyond. I do think we're very close, but not
quite there.

Short Version: We have all the pieces--but not in the right order, imo.

Longer Version ...

*	Item: Please recall Michael's comments suggesting a comparison of the two
approaches as an introduction to those approaches. We have this
overview, but it's Section 4.

Suggestion: Move it to Section 2. Then what is currently 2, can become
3, and 3 can become 4.

*	Item: I wonder if we've placed the Poe too high each time. Might
*	it make more sense to introduce the particular pieces of we're
*	adopting first? Then, present the Poe as the last example as a
*	subsection called something like: "Comprehensive Application" or
*	"Tieing it all together."

Does this make sense? I think it would make a smoother read.

Best,

Janina





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Janina Sajka
https://linkedin.com/in/jsajka

Linux Foundation Fellow
Executive Chair, Accessibility Workgroup:	http://a11y.org

The World Wide Web Consortium (W3C), Web Accessibility Initiative (WAI)
Co-Chair, Accessible Platform Architectures	http://www.w3.org/wai/apa

Received on Saturday, 1 May 2021 06:17:02 UTC