redling the explainer

Here are my proposed changes to:https://rawcdn.githack.com/w3c/personalization-semantics/c177e6c5679a8fad90b5243cbd4d33955290dca2/explainer.html





1: a jacket with pants, or a text alternative of “Very cold”. For something like the humidity index of 90%, a text alternative of “muggy”. 



should be changed to:



next to the number 95℉, there could be

-a picture of someone wearing shorts and a tee-shirt with the sun above or

-simply a text alternative of “Very warm”.



Next to the number 40℉, there could be 

-a picture of someone wearing a jacket with pants, or

-a text alternative of “Very cold”. For something like the humidity index of 90%, a text -alternative of “muggy”.





2: For something like the humidity index of 90%, a text alternative of “muggy”.

should be changed to:

Next to the humidity index of 90%, there could be a text alternative of “muggy”.





3: _name_ or _last name_ but have not learned the term "family name"



should have consistent notation - iether quotes or underlines



4: People who know different symbol-sets wish to talk to each other. A government agency..



should be changed to:

-People who know different symbol-sets wish to talk to each other.

-A government agency...



5: reading may also be very slow so finding the right information can be a barrier.

needs an added coma



6: data-symbol: should not be written as code if it is a heading - should be bold or a heading



7: Add " In the screen shots below a browser extension uses the data-symbol attribute to load symbols that are familiar to the user and modify the user experience to the individual user needs."

Then Move the last sentence to the top





8:For some users, the duration of working memory may be shorter than the average of between 10-15 seconds.

should be changed to:

For some users, the number of items or data that can be stored in working memory is a significantly less than the populations average. Whereas most adults can repeat about seven digits in correct order, the user my only manage two or three numbers. When they become distracted, they are also likely to forget any information in their working memory.





All the best

Lisa Seeman

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