Suggested edits for Profile Draft

Hi,

Not sure if I missed some contentious discussion, and understand the task is corrective not additive, but the lack of Party subtypes Existing Client and Prospective Client is irksome - their introduction would likely solve the redistribution testcases 1-4 and 10<https://github.com/w3c/market-data-odrl-profile/blob/gh-pages/Test-Cases.md#rod-1>), so have added below as § 2.1.2.1.8-9 (updating § 2.1.1 to reflect).

Best regards,
Caspar


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§ 2.1 Parties

§ 2.1.1 Party Role

In distribution use cases, the type of third-party recipient is often significant.  We differentiate between professional<https://w3c.github.io/market-data-odrl-profile/md-odrl-profile.html#professional-party>, non-professional<https://w3c.github.io/market-data-odrl-profile/md-odrl-profile.html#non-professional-party>, and educational<https://w3c.github.io/market-data-odrl-profile/md-odrl-profile.html#educational-party> parties, and between existing<https://w3c.github.io/market-data-odrl-profile/md-odrl-profile.html#existing-client-party> and prospective<https://w3c.github.io/market-data-odrl-profile/md-odrl-profile.html#prospective-client-party> clients.

§ 2.1.2.1.1 Originator

Note:    Originators may use an Administrator to manage their rights assignments and a Service Facilitator to destribute the data.    s/destribute/distribute/


§ 2.1.2.1.4 Service Facilitator

Definition: The role an external organisation plays when contracted by the Assignee to deliver a business function using the assignee"s data access rights.      s/assignee"s/assignee's/g     (global typo)


NOTE
When is this duty activated? When the Assigner intends to make an External Party with the role of Service Facilitator a recipient of the data Asset - i.e. when the recipient constraint is satisfied.

To fulfill the Duty, the subject Party of the Duty (not specified in this example) must take the Action of notifying the object Party of about the target of the Duty: the Service Facilitator. They need only do this once for the duty to be fulfilled.


§ 2.1.2.1.5 Administrator

NOTE  We can imagine a Administrator so:    s/a Administrator/an Administrator/



§<https://w3c.github.io/market-data-odrl-profile/md-odrl-profile.html#existing-client-party> 2.1.2.1.8 Existing Client

Definition:

A Party<https://www.w3.org/TR/odrl-vocab/#term-Party> that is a current consumer of services provided by the Assignee<https://www.w3.org/TR/odrl-vocab/#term-assignee>.

Label:

Existing Client Party

Identifier:

http://www.w3.org/md-odrl-profile/ExistingClientParty

Sub-class Of:

http://www.w3.org/md-odrl-profile/ExternalParty

Disjoint with:

Prospective Client Party<http://www.w3.org/md-odrl-profile/ProspectiveClientParty>


§<https://w3c.github.io/market-data-odrl-profile/md-odrl-profile.html#prospective-client-party> 2.1.2.1.9 Prospective Client

Definition:

A Party<https://www.w3.org/TR/odrl-vocab/#term-Party> that the Assignee<https://www.w3.org/TR/odrl-vocab/#term-assignee> is engaging with in order to procure such Party<https://www.w3.org/TR/odrl-vocab/#term-Party> as a consumer of services provided by the Assignee<https://www.w3.org/TR/odrl-vocab/#term-assignee>.

Label:

Prospective Client Party

Identifier:

http://www.w3.org/md-odrl-profile/ProspectiveClientParty

Sub-class Of:

http://www.w3.org/md-odrl-profile/ExternalParty

Disjoint with:

Existing Client Party<http://www.w3.org/md-odrl-profile/ExistingClientParty>



§ 2.3 Activities

Global typo in all Prov-O hyperlinks' display text;  s/Activitiy/Activity/g


§ 4.1 Duty Functions

Duty functions specify the role a Party plays in fulfilling a Duty. Only two are required: the subject who must exercise the duty"s action and the object who recieves the effect of the action.  Sequences of request-response interactions may be formed by chaining Duties where the subject and object Parties alternate.

s/duty"s/duty's/

s/recieves/receives/


4.3.1 Notify

s/See Example 1/See Example 3/


4.3.2 Report

s/See Example 2/See Example 5/


§ 4.3.4 Consent

s/Example 1/Example 3/

Also broken hyperlink for "Example 1"   s/ServiceFacilitatorNotification/#ServiceFacilitatorNotification/

§ 5.3.7 purposes

Example 14<https://w3c.github.io/market-data-odrl-profile/md-odrl-profile.html#ControlsRecipientsPurposes> has md:purposes in the domain of md:Permission, but in the description it's listed as domain of md:Action


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