RE: SWAD-E postcard mockup

Libby -
Looks pretty good.  Some assorted minor quibblage:

* (probably) most people in the EC will know what "EC" stands for, but
others quite likely won't

* "Where are other SW developers located?" - might want an "in Europe" in
there somewhere, to acknowledge that there are Other Places in the world (qv
the map discussion)  

* is open source really Open Source? :-).  Similarly, you use both Semantic
Web and semantic web - would be better to be consistent.  I don't have a
strong preference.

* "bridging the gap between semantic web technology and the XML tool stack "
my suggestion: "bridging the gaps between semantic web tools and XML tools"
or even "applying standard XML tools to semantic web problems"

* "... storing and search semantic web data" -> s/search/searching/

* "case studies and demonstration applications" -> add comma after
applications

* "holding developer workshops " -> delete 'holding' ... a workshop is an
activity, I assert :-)

* I'd reorder the second major sentence to emphasise the outcome rather than
the process, something like:

Our goal is to refine and field-test Semantic Web standards, through open
source tool development, community building, outreach and evangelism, and
advanced R&D.

Hope this is not too late.

Cheers,
Ian


> -----Original Message-----
> From: Libby Miller [mailto:Libby.Miller@bristol.ac.uk] 
> Sent: 05 May 2003 15:52
> To: public-esw@w3.org; em
> Subject: SWAD-E postcard mockup
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> http://sw1.ilrt.org/discovery/2003/04/svggeo/postcard/postcard
> -txt-2003-05-05.html
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> It's a bit grainy - the actual thing won't look like that.
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> could I have comments by tomorrow please? We need to get this 
> done and dusted asap or we won't have the cards ready for WWW2003.
> 
> cheers
> 
> Libby
>

Received on Monday, 5 May 2003 13:59:35 UTC